Nature washes away
everything they worked for
as their American dreams
go up in smoke.
Author notes
Photo: Flag Smoke by Keb-freakingnews.com
A contest entry
- - Independent Intervals - [15 Words Again] by Desire.
700 points, ended July 4, 14 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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short but nice i love it keep it up ...
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Thank You!!
Thank You for Your entry: American Dreams
This piece tugged hard at Spirit and while I was reading which I did several times~ I kept being shown the wildfires that ravaged Northern California also being shown a match- being lit-
For some reason being given word: Poseidon- and then Hurricane Katrina also the distraught faces with tears flowing down muddied faces After reading Your verse again, being shown farmers crops devastated by the flooding- generation farmers, their hands cupped to cover their grief and also tornados that tore through the Boy Scout camp~ whether metaphor or symbolism-
Hopefully that makes some sense
Magnificent take on the prompt~
Powerful message & images You have brought forth
These words grabbed and pulled~
...American Dreams go up in smoke.
Unique Voice spoken~
Thank You for sharing Your Heart also Spirit!
Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
**Judging will be done shortly...
Many blessings too
and much love & light~ Desire~*~
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With all that's going on in the world today I can actually see that happening. It's sad, but a very true case.
Happy 4th!
Kari
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excellent
nice short and sweet.right upto the point.What is the natural phenomenon you have in mind.You should at least include a line of hint after this line:
Nature washes away
anyway a good read.Thanks for sharing.Please visit my portfolio of poetry and let me know what do you think of the items posted therein. -
oh feck, sorry for clicking on this again, i didn't realise I'd already read and commented on it >.<
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This is absolutely stunning, and it is a wonderful take on the picture. Best of luck in your contest, I'm sure you'll place high.
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How true the words. That is why people must strive to protect what is importent to them. Whether it be hopes or dreams, all make up who we are. If we lose either we lose ourselves.
Best Of Luck,
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I kindov really like it. it gives a great message. it would be good if it was longer, but I'm guessing the contest ur in says it has 2 be short? good effort. well done.
Nature washes away
everything they worked for
as their American dreams
go up in smoke. -
Life is made up of cycles; life, death, and in between the days go by filled with good and bad. Interesting take on this picture prompt.
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Although I agree with the piece as for what is stated in it, the end was rather cliche. Overall this is good, short and to the point. I wish you well with the contest you have it entered in.
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And they largely have.
But worse is to come.
Just better believe it.
Iraq?
Credit crunch?
Oil?
Wait until the Arabs and Chinese REALLY get into their stride................. -
Killer!
In America today that's the absolute truth! We won't have an America for long at the rate things are going today!
Great point in prose!
Jennifer
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fantastic
While I disagree with many parts of the 'american dream' and what not, I do have to say that these simple words linked together quite casually as you have done in the poem worked fabuously; and made for some graphic reading - nice job and best of luck in the contest
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But such is the destiny of mankind, isn't it? Rise and fall, again and again.... One day, the greatest world's nation shall become decadent and there is no way to avoid that... After all, nature shall even the scales... Good write...
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