a sky of angry screeching
demanding
like a raptor in the wind
doesn't have the impact
that simple tweeting brings
a predator's words rip
into flesh tired of life
not accomplishing
anything
but the sharpening of the knife
Author notes
Rule 5: I have read and understand all rules.
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some hash realities here. Sometimes people can cut you deep and emotionally kill you. No true good person would do that on purpose.
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some hash realities here. Sometimes people can cut you deep and emotionally kill you. No true good person would do that on purpose.
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some hash realities here. Sometimes people can cut you deep and emotionally kill you. No true good person would do that on purpose.
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some hash realities here. Sometimes people can cut you deep and emotionally kill you. No true good person would do that on purpose.
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Deep emotion exhibited here, and powerful imagery. Great job, and good luck in the contest
♥ Kathraina -
Powerful and intense, Great Imagery.
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i like the flow of this one
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Tres' deep is this one, I love how it ended-lots of golden nuggets just inside of the ending alone lol
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ah.. no dark and compelling write. You do have a way with the words.
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Strong. Powerful and deep words here. You have really put your emotion into this. Very well-written indeed. Keep writing.
Dark
Love
Wayne Leon
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ow!
nice imagination! puts a greatly intense picture in your mind. awesome!
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Intense....the imagery you've captured in so few lines/words is spectacular! I love this,
Thanks for sharing, and taking the time to enter my contest,
Luck. -
beautiful contrast
this begins so full of noise,
but then the despair
- "flesh tired of living" -
drowns out the rest, the sound of defeat becoming deafening.
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you've given this piece such imagery, sharp and pointed - like a knife
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How very true my dear, and your wisdom shines in the brilliant penning! All the best in the contest as well!
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yes words can certainly wound like the piercing of a knife. good job.
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OUCH!
This poem just cuts you like a knife! Powerful work here Celadia. GOOD STUFF!
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wow! I really liked this. Great imagery! I especially liked "like a raptor in the wind", so powerful! Good luck in the contest!
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Wonderful
Very creative and well done. Best of luck in the contest.
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words can shred like the knife or talons,, sharp writing ..good luck xx
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"a predator's words rip
into flesh tired of life
not accomplishing
anything
but the sharpening of the knife "
great job <3 and good luck
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