I met you long before,
Remember, one fine day,
Not behind the doors,
But in the lap of Mother Nature, say!
The earth was green,
The sky was blue,
For me it was like a dream,
Which had come true.
For every word you said,
And every word I took,
Still remembering the joy that laid,
In every single thing you made me look.
For it was my fault,
Myself I helped you to let me jolt,
For the friendship I thought was eternal & divine,
Was nothing but a dark grave & not a shrine.
Why was I hurt when I was not wrong?
Why our friendship did not last long?
Was I on the darker side?
Tell me the reason for you to break our feelings which were tied.
Why am I forced
To think of such a friend,
During my chores,
Which due to this, usually wends.
What in you was exaggeratingly personified?
For you to be my close friend,
Something has still kept me to you tied,
Help me to put it to an end.
Now I know friendship is nothing,
But a mere trade for season,
For when season is over,
To stay together anymore one has no reason.
You were my faith,
For once in you deeply I believed,
But shattered into pieces, later
It lay beneath your feet.
I don’t expect mercy,
For when you read this,
But realization of your wrong deeds,
Is my only wish.
I always wanted to stand by your side,
Never allowing the sorrow to even pass you by,
But it was my mistake,
Coz I never knew the rules & regulations of your mind state.
You thought me to be a mere trespasser,
In your journey of life,
a MILESTONE were YOU for ME,
Deep within my heart always close you see.
Remember you always said:
You hardly disclose yourself,
This was the reason,
Coz I never wanted to be a slave of someone else’s decision.
What a fool I am,
To still pray for you,
For your good health and fine spirits,
When I know I mean nothing to you.
I still remember the hands,
That stretched out to hold me,
When I was falling downstairs.
I still remember the voice
That said: no don’t hang up now
It’s not too late.
I still remember the tears,
That rolled down my cheeks,
When you deserted me -
A girl with deep believes.
I still remember the fights we used to have,
As a matter of clash of opinion,
But never had I thought one day,
It would turn into such a grave one.
I still remember the compliments,
You gave for the dresses I wore,
And the way I was
Enchanted after this to my core.
I still have the memories intact in my mind,
And I am sure this not going to be erased in any span of time,
Could have hoped the same from you too,
But gave up for I know,
I MEAN NOTHING TO YOU ……………..
- Ankita Ashesh.
Author notes
This poem is a dedication to that "one" who is "no one" in my life now!
I just wanna say now U DON'T MEAN A THING TO ME !
-Ankita A.
A contest entry
- Betrayal by Baisi.
1200 points, ended November 23, 2008, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give me your break-up poems by trekkergirl.
400 points, ended January 5, 80 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I definitely feel angery, hurt, and resentment in this write. You wrote it wonderfully descriptive. A good write in that it speaks to the reader. Great job and thanks for sharing this with us and thanks for entering it into my contest. Also, congrats on receiving the HM with this poem. Well deserved.
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Thank you so much for the thoughtful comment . I am glad you liked my write .
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AMAZING
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oh THANK YOU soooo much BAISI .... u made my day .... thanks for HM !!!
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"I still remember the voice
That said: no don’t hang up now
It’s not too late."
Breathtaking! Awesome! =D
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THANK YOU SOoo MUCH FOR ALL THE BEAUTIFUL COMMENTS !
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AGREAT POEM 45 POINTS
LOVE
APARNAAGARWAL
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Thank you !!
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Very well written, but there were a few things that bugged me. The rhyme was not consistent in it's pattern, and it seemed a little forced, which bugged me, seeing as it takes a lot to make me like a rhyming poem.
Though, this is an exception, and I agree with DramaLady, this is breathtaking, and I like it alot.
Thank you for entering.
All in all, this was a terrific read.
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This was BREATHTaking!! So much anger and so many emotions were in this write. I also liked your usernotes, I wish to shout this at the face of 'someone' who's actually 'no one' anymore. Perfect! I also liked the anger you showed in the end, even there was sadness mixed up with this anger. Though there were some weak places but I enjoyed your write very very much. Keep it up. plz.
~Noor
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THANK YOU so much for the comment !!!
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Powerful, and breathtaking.
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thank you!
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hmmmm.....
nice longish poem ankita... but sometimes i guess a few lines say a lot than long crippled verses... nonetheless you seem quiet good in what you write... keep on doin it... it was nice to read your poem...
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thank you I am glad u enjoyed reading my work.
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a very powerful write with great flow and sorrow. Nicely done.
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What a beautiful write, a great entry for this contest. A perfectly penned write with great flow and good imagery. Thank you for the entry. Keep the pen flowing...the pleasure was all mine.
Nevadapoet
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You were my faith,
For once in you deeply I believed,
But shattered into pieces, later
It lay beneath your feet.
I've felt this way, still do.
Great write. Thank you for entering the contest and good luck -
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THANX SO MUCH !!
thanx for the beautiful comment .......well m so glad that u read my poem so keenly .....n i have the highest regards for you because this stanza is my fav of all n m glad u noticed it !!!!
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Very well done.
"I still remember the hands,
That stretched out to hold me,
When I was falling downstairs."
I love this phrase, it just realy signifies the meaning and thought you put into this write.
Fantastic.
Thank you for entereing and good luck to you.
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Breathtaking!
i can feel all the emotions venting from this poem
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wow... breathtaking... how saddening and emotionally filled this poem is... your feelings and emotions are so true and strong in this piece. keep up the good work!
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thank you......bt let me tell u my feelings and emotions are nt strong enough to be understood by the one for whom its written.....anyways thanks so much for ur comment!!!!!!!
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