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Delicate swirling paisley print,

cotton cooled,

flows elegantly on silken tan.

 

Shading parasol under midday sun,

She floats..........

 

Freely,

Her heart skips.

 

Sweet scents of Cherry blossom,

unfurl.

 
Sprig, hand picked,

A reminder.

 

Fields capturing dreams,

a tapestry in cross stitch,

framing perfection.

 

She wanders.....


 

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( Spring Stole My Heart )

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  • LadyDementia gold member
    July 15, 2008

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    Beautifully penned hun, reminds me of what spring should be like *sighs* Warm, happy, full of joy. Instead we have dull and wet here...lol. Congrats on the HM!


  • notorious gold member
    July 7, 2008

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    This makes me think of a song by Vanessa Carlton called "She floats"..

    Anyways..

    That first stanza is excellent description of the picture...great job.

    "Shading parasol under midday son"
    'Parasol' is SUCH a groovy word...it works so well in this line.

    "Sweet scents of cherry blossom, unfurl."
    Love the word 'unfurl'...great verb usage.

    "a tapestry in cross stitch,
    framing perfection."
    Ah...fantastical line...If perfection could be framed, I'd hang it on my wall =D


    • Reptile Lady gold member
      July 8, 2008
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      Thank you for your beautiful comment
      I am honored you viewed it that way
      J x


  • sailor ptolema
    July 7, 2008

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    This is lovely! Simply divine! I'm so sorry but I won't be able to leave as long a comment as I'd like, as I'm pressed for time

    but you diction, does wonders, and surpasses the picture. It's eloquently and expertly placed. there are no bland phrasings.

    "Delicate swirling paisley print,
    cotton cooled,">>>>>>>>>>>just divine...*sighs*

    "Sprig, hand picked,
    A reminder.">>>>>>I LOVe this.....a reminder....of what I wonder? that spring will come? that happiness will come? a reminder of a lover? the possibilities go on... I love how opened this is..


    "She wanders.....">>>> LOVE this...captures the girl perfectly....and it just floats.

    divine creation.

    thank you for entering and g'luck!

    S.P.~

    • Reptile Lady gold member
      July 7, 2008
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      Thank you
      A beautiful prompt you gave me to work with
      and for the HM x


  • just weak hands
    July 2, 2008
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    beautiful and rather captivating ! another great write !


  • Abe 1
    July 2, 2008

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    dis is nice really it is lovely paisley print seeks and she wanders onwards to a lovely place of dreams
    ope ya do well u deserve 2
    abe


  • Lil-Bit Crazy
    July 2, 2008

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    yay!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! for sppring then...... whata lovely write...... thanks for sharing this and good luck in this contest......!!!!!!!!!!!


  • OnceUponAMind silver member
    July 1, 2008

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    Ahhhhh, what a lovely read So smooth, flowing beautifuly! Great job, and best of luck in the contest dear


  • BuriedTreasures silver member
    July 1, 2008
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    Your words breathe life into the picture!!!
    Well Done & Best of luck in the contest!!


  • daviscth silver member
    July 1, 2008

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    This is such a beautiful and whimiscal write sis. I love how the last line just lingers... The imagery is awesome.


  • maralisa silver member
    July 1, 2008

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    wow julie this was just so beautiful full of wonderful imergery all the way through a stunningly beautiful poem I loved the following lines
    Shading parasol under midday sun,She floats..Sweet scents of Cherry blossom,unfurl.Fields capturing dreams,a tapestry in cross stitch,framing perfection.
    good luck in the contest my friend take care marina


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    July 1, 2008

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    That was wonderful. Fantastic writing, my sister. Wonderful imagery here too.  Very very sensual piece this is. I can see this becoming a gold piece. Well done Julie.

    Darkest
    Love
    Wayne Leon
    xx


  • Angelflower
    July 1, 2008

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    You did a wonderful job!!! I really loved this!!! The emotion and imagery was just wow.. You did great!!!! Best of luck!!


    Angel


  • sailor ptolema
    July 1, 2008
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    http://orchidelutza.deviantart.com/art/Spring-stole-my-heART-83603749

    love this one!!

    ~all my best

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