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I Dream Of Horses

Thunder that calls us all to battle

The power of the fight that hums through our veins,

Iron laced muscle covered in heated silk,

The surging body that heaves against the reins. 

The effortless movement that trembles the earth,

Speed and grace, passion and joy.

Nothing in this world could ever replace,

The complete abandonment of worldly treasures,

For wealth beyond all known measures.

The divine creature that beneath me pounds,

Hooves that move to no heard sounds,

Drumbeats lost on timeless plains

Race away before the rains,

Challenging the wind,

Oh the victory that is ours,

Not taken away by minutes, or hours.

But seduced by time eternal, unyielding,

A flame-covered sword the master is wielding,

Smiting his vengeance upon those lesser mortals,

Who dare to cross such hallowed portals.

Mountains covered in darkest ice

Bear no meaning to such sound vice

And though the war continues to rage

No fear will strike one so brave.

Heart so full of honor and truth,

Spirit uncowed by ignorant youth,

And so on this path of strife laid out by fate,

Driven by need, nothing can sate.

So set in its course,

Thus travels the horse.

 

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"Mustang"

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  • angels of the night silver member
    July 1, 2008

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    this is a very strong poem about horses i love the flow and passion that u have put into this poem!!

    good luck in our contest
    from angel


  • Nature Song silver member
    July 1, 2008

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    'The divine creature that beneath me pounds,
    Hooves that move to no heard sounds,
    Drumbeats lost on timeless plains'

    Drumbeats across the plains, sets the course for the mustangs! No movement to be heard! Wonderfyl lines.

    Good luck in our contest ~Sie

  • angels of the night silver member
    July 1, 2008
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    hey ur poem is good but u NEED TO OBEY BY THE RULES U HAVE TO INCLUDE MUSTANG IN THE AUTHORS NOTES..i will comment again later on ur poem and tell u how i liked it, but include wat the rules say