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leave the light on

 

 

 

Let's leave the light on tonight, you are beautiful;

let me watch the flicker

in your eyes when you sigh.

 

I want to touch you everywhere; all at once. 

 

Let me tease your skin with tips

of my fingers; trace the tremor

in the quake of your spine.

 

Let me ride my palms up the sides of you;

cup your breasts. Slowly show you

the depth of my love.

 

Hands hug hip-bones; gently guiding

their sway. I want to make love.

To hear the murmer of my name

on your lips.

 

Let's leave the light on tonight. Baby,

you are beautiful to me.

 

I want to watch you un-fold in my arms;

come un-done before my eyes.

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Very sensual write poet, hope u do well in the contest.


  • adsaige gold member
    July 3

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    this is a very sensual piece. perhaps
    a bit too telling than showing...in my
    opinion. i'm so sorry if it seems like i'm
    only leaving negative remarks on your poems...
    it's just that...there is something missing
    from the poems that you have held back.

    perhaps, you were under pressure? is that

    the right word.

     

    overall, the piece is provocative and uses

    beautiful imagery, i feel as though you can

    make me...see it and feel it rather than

    tell me what you want.


  • voodoo ink
    July 1

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    A spicy sensual poem...my favorite lines were these:
    Hands hug hip-bones; gently guiding

    their sway. I want to make love.

    To hear the murmer of my name

    on your lips.



    Let's leave the light on tonight. Baby,

    you are beautiful to me.



    I want to watch you un-fold in my arms;

    come un-done before my eyes.


  • Nicolette gold member
    July 1

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    Very sensual, very lovely...one indeed wants to leave the light on here in this room!

    ~ Nicolette

  • celadia gold member
    July 1
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    Lovely, beautiful. I think you have a talent for steamy stuff. Just a wonderful write.
  • Sensual... lovely Juls

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