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[ Immured in the imposter of wood, ]

Immured in the imposter of wood,
stained with the swirls
that represent authenticity
and for once it slips on gently
like skin-to-skin
a softness that always
shocks with suprise
and presents the forked decision
to choose horror or pleasure.

Author notes

Not finished. Needs a lot of work. I remember when writing poetry was easier. When did it get harder? Or is it a lot like math--while it may be easy to master say simple Algebra, the more complex the problems, the more chances there are for mistakes. I don't know.

I only wrote this because I was overjoyed to learn the word immure and its definition, and told all my friends I was going to write something and use that word.

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  • tragicallyGifted
    July 15, 2008

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    Hmm. I get the impression of white lies:

    "Immured in the imposter of wood,
    stained with the swirls
    that represent authenticity"


    Then the concious slip of tongue that lets them out:

    "and for once it slips on gently
    like skin-to-skin"


    And then having to pick wether to keep on with it:

    "to chose horror or pleasure." (I believe it should be 'choose'?)


    Of course, the word immured meaning 'to enclose, trap'. Getting wrapped up, stuck in all the words.



    Now, I'm probably way off on my interpretation but my mind's been on hiatus and the thinking needs to work through a few kinks. A good write, though. One of your best, in my opinion.


    • singingfreedom
      July 15, 2008
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      Yup, way off, but that's okay, I wasn't expecting my meaning to be all that clear.

      Part of the definition of immure was "to imprison, as if in a wall". So I took it literally. "Immured in the imposter of wood" was because I was thinking of my old house. We lived in a mobile home, and it had that cheesy fake wood paneling. "stained with the swirls that represent authenticity"

      This is a memory for me. Of standing against that wall, watching something take place (that I'd rather not repeat) and wishing to disappear inside of it.

      The rest of the piece has multiple meanings; to many to go into detail about.

      But thanks for your interpretation! It's always nice to see how other people see things.


  • Gagiikwe
    July 2, 2008

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    Who passed Algebra?

    Hi Stummbles,

    Line 6: 'a softens' or 'a softness' ?

    Lovely use of language; but I don't have a clue what you are talking about.