Blushed contour,
mirage of love,
pretty feathers
to camouflage crimson tears,
as sapphire eyes
stare in autumn of life.
Mask commanded to wear out,
for heart
pines to live.
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A contest entry
- BIG Points picture semi-quickie!!!! COME SEE! by sailor ptolema.
1700 points, ended July 7, 2008, 29 entries
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Comments
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aww this was so sweet and delicate! Just like the picture.
Blushed contour,>>I like that you don't talk about her eyes or cheeks directly, but the shape that they have.
mirage of love,>>>aw, this is sad, only an illusion of love, her make-up masks ...
pretty feathers
to camouflage crimson tears,
as sapphire eyes
stare in autumn of life.>>>>this is dainty and sad, "autumn of life">>makes me think that she feels so lost and alone, the leaves are falling from the trees. It's a beautiful season, but also the season of change, preparation for winter, so it's like she is going to be feeling even worse soon.. :9
Mask commanded to wear out,
for heart
pines to live.>>>>>>this is so heart wrenching! She forces herself to wear this mirage of happiness, because she doesn't want winter to come. She doesn't want to feel cold....
you penned an eloquently saddening piece.
thank you for entering and g'luck!!
S.P.~
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