We are the forgotten,
the old generation,
used up cast away,
without consideration.
We planted the roses
for you to smell,
now you plow them under,
as you speed towards hell.
Whether we picked cotton
or used our imagination,
we did what we could
and built this great nation.
We gave it our all,
for freedom one and all
and built it for you,
so you could stand tall.
Author notes
By ~ Maxboy
Background By ~ Riftkin
How quickly they forget
...............................Contest~Option#2~Forgotten
...............................Contest~MAKE ME FEEL~ Entry 2 of 2
HM(2),
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- Independence Day Celebration by MoonsShadow.
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Amazing. I love when I can read such a short piece and get so much out of it. The prompt fit perfectly with this piece.
Thanks so much for entering
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Thank you so much for your wonderful comment, I am pleased you enjoyed my poem.
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I love this poem alot. its short but has so much power behind those words. i absolutely love the title, it just flows throughout the whole poem and the lines
We planted the roses
for you to smell,
now you plow them under,
as you speed towards hell.
Are just excellent, the highlight of the poem. I wish the ending would wrap it up a bit, it wasn't as dramtic as the rest of the poem folowing the message, but they were powerful about the 'Founders'of this nation, the older elderly that we tand to forget. i must say this really touched me dearly, especially when you say how we 'plow them under' it just brought me to a new realization. this message is wonderful and the flow, oh wow, its great.
i love rhyme and when people rhyme like this, like poetry is supposed to be, then i love a poem. alot. i really appreciate the thoughts behind the words, the underlying message behind the fact that the old generation is forgotten, to me it was that they need to be considered, not just left there to be remembered as nothing but the now.
another message that really touched my heart, sorry this is so long but this is really great, is that we screwed up, badly. and we keep screwing up something that the older generation gave there all to give. its just something you cant and shouldn't forget. its this world that we live in now, with its freedoms and liberties, with its technology and knowledge, with its easy accessibility and greatness, that came from not us, but the Older generation, the ones who we should be considering everyday, thanking that we can do what we want to do whenever we want to. that peole can walk the streets and regard each other we some degree of fairness, equality, and liberty.
thank you for entering my contest and you did an excellent job. Good luck <3
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Thank you so much for the applause and beautiful comment. I am so very happy you could appreciate my message, one I have expressed in many of my writes.
Thank You
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I love the pictures, especially the one with the cat. This poem shows how the Elderly are being left behind these days, but people are living longer, so the old cannot be forgotten. Very good job, thank you for entering my contest.
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Thank you so much for the Honorable Mention, it does mean alot.
Don
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Thank you for the very nice comment.
Don
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I love all of your pictures, and all of your works, they are full of such strong emotion. Good job and good luck.
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Thank you very much for your complements and comment.
Don
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Unfortunately this poem vividly tells of a sad truth. Youth is always convinced that they know more (and they know it better) and now because the work of the previous generation has allowed the younger generation today to grow up in luxury, there is a sense of entitlement. Well written piece!! Nice job with the rhyming.
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Thank you for the applause and wonderful comment.
Don
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:)))beautiful!
very nicely said ...i shall take the advice i always feel the older you are the wiser you get...
good luck!
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Thank you very much for the applause and wonderful comment. From one that should be wise, wise, wise.
Thanks
Don
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The story is wonderful and the flow would be very nice if the commas didn't seem overused. I really liked the word choice for this. We should all be grateful for the elderly and all of their wisdom and hard work. Thanks for entering and good luck
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Thank you for your very helpful comment. Sorry for all the commas, but they are intended to give pause for the intended meter, as I read it. I did sacrifice flow, as you pointed out, in order to emphasize the message.
Thanks Again
Don
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Yet again I think this is an awesome poem. I like the way you express your thoughts here. Enjoyed the read! Thank you for entering my contest.
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Thank you, but I removed it when I saw it had been in your last contest. I didn't think you would want to see it again.
Sorry
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This really hit me hard, for I have seen it too much...they forgotten, stuck in some room in a house woith so many other...family never comes and they wait and wonder wishing to be back in their homes, never understanding...we are a generation of greed and disposable everything, including people...wonderfully written and so true...more need to read your words and think about what they do...we would no nothing if not for the people we throw away...they built our future and taught us how to survive...
This is deep and a Golden write...
Blessings to you!
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Thank you so much for the applause and wonderful comment. I really like your use of the word "disposable", that one word sums it up perfectly. If you don't mind, I would like to use that in the future.
Thank You
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"We are the forgotten,
the old generation,
used up cast away,
without consideration."
How sad.
I wish people would consider who made their life possible for them.
The rhyming is well written and it doesn't seem forced at all;
which, I guess, is hard for people to do these days.
Thank you for entering.
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Thank you for the wonderful comment. Yes it is sad, but I am trying to open a few eyes.
Thanks
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This is an awesome poem. I like the way you express your thoughts here. Enjoyed the read! Thank you for entering my contest.
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Thank you very much for the great comment.
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I like this; raw, and edgy, my style.. good luck to you in the contests you have entered lol
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Thank you for all the support you have given.
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Very good write!
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Proud. Defiant. The voices of a generation too long ignored by the present one. This one rang. Very nicely done.
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Thank you so much for the very nice comment.
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You will never be forgotten for me or mine
In our culture (native american) We celebrate our old. The give us their wisdom and remind us of where we come from. Those who do forget are bound to an eternity of repeating their mistakes.
God Bless
Tammy
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We all could learn alot if we practiced the native american culture more, life would be so much easier and less complicated.
Thank you for the comment,
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I really enjoyed this piece, and the stark reality that everyone tries to sweep under the rug! My favorite part is
We planted the roses
for you to smell,
now you plow them under,
as you speed towards hell.
Great job and best wishes in the contest!
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Thank you so much for the applause and wonderful comment
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Yes, Sadly They Have...
forgotten the price paid for their freedoms. They use the very freedoms past and present patriots gave their very lives for, turn around and slander them and spit upon them. They have used there freedome of speech to bad mouth the country and call our leaders vile and disgusting names in the name of free speech. They have indeed turned our nation spiraling toward hell as you state in this piece!!! Thanks for standing up to those who pretend to be patriotic and use free speech to pander their own agenda!!!! God Bless you and AMERICA!!!!~~~Toni~~~
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Thank you for the great comment. I hope you get a big turnout for the contest.
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This poem is one of a kind, just as you are. You wording is so powerful. I have to say that even though you may be the older generation, you will never be forgotten (wink wink) Hugs.
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Thanks for the hugs and us old guys really like a wink from the girls.haha
Thanks for the very nice comment.
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I love the second stanza
"We planted the roses
for you to smell,
now you plow them under,
as you speed towards hell."
it's just a really vivid image that stuck in my mind.
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Thank you so much for the very nice comment.
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oh how true
this poem tells it like it is in life, this gave me a very clear picture of we as the elder generation, lived and served this country, thank you very much for entering this contest, good luck...
Lin
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Thank you very much for the Honorable Mention, it does meen a lot to me.
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Thank you very much for the applause and the very nice comment.
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