Loving you for just another moment longer
Building dreams will never reach the top
All hope is lost slipping away through my fingers
Promising lies sinks down into the depth
Bitter sweet words on your deceiving lips
Crying for a yesterday that's never meant to be
Don't utter one more word of pain
Don't utter one more word of love
Leaving the fading moment underneath the ruins
Undeniable truth unfolds...I'm exposed
Blinded by a web of lies that you kindly bestowed onto me
My heart is drowning below the frozen sea
Picking at my bleeding wounds one layer at a time
Dwelling onto the silent cries in the night
Don't utter one more word of hope
Don't utter one more word of lies
Gambling at a high price for a love that have ceased to exist
Losing all of my sanity in the processed
Barren soul wasted away in the wind
False illusions cheated by the eyes
Appearance of one's kiss and embrace
Betrayed by my lingering tears
Just when I step into reality, I was pulled back by fear
On that pathway that we both took long ago
Petals of the last flower faded away
...Here we meet again...
Walking passed without one single glimpse
Shivering chills of one's touch
Falling tears hidden from your view
Further away I'm falling apart
...So this is Goodbye...
Author notes
Inspired by this picture:
http://allpoetry.com/images/ext/Contest/2412/141.jpg?1214932408
A contest entry
- Another Quickie? [I'm on a roll !!] by YoureNoGoodForMe.
300 points, ended July 1, 9 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Haunting and so very sad. Loved your use of metaphor and vocabulary, as well as the slight repetition. A lot of people tend to go overboard with it, myself included, but I think you did a very tasteful job of it. I think this was my favorite line:
Undeniable truth unfolds...I'm exposed
It's funny how truth can expose us, both in good ways and in bad. Lovely write, dear. Cheers!
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Ohkay, so this is just AMAZING. Wow. You leave me in awe with all of yer poems!
Seriously, though, this poem was so excellently written and held so much emotion that was just so enduring and REAL. I lovvved it.
"Bitter sweet words on your deceiving lips
Crying for a yesterday that's never meant to be"
Some of my favorite lines Loved ittt. Incredible. Wow. Seriously, if you place, it's not because you're my sistah from anothah mistah but because this poem is just so STRONG and definitely hit home. Wow. Thanks for entering & best of luck to you! Keep writing♥
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I'm just in a sad loving moment and the picture is just the push for me to write this piece..Thanks for your endearing words..I'm glad you love it
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