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The Psalms of Purity

Pristine walls of unblemished alabaster

joined at entrance's spotless ivory double doors

guarded by row of matching hued colonnades,

set behind emerald lawn of manicured elegance.

 

Serenity shimmers from the edifice's purity ambience

mind imbued that only peace dwells within,

a sanctuary from chaos, chamber of calm

haven for paths to inner paradise.

 

But conscience can avoid the intuitive resonance

seeing old man in wheelchair sitting in bay window,

clad in ashen patient's robe, pallor face haggard and vacant

his eyes pleading the dirge of death's impending song.

 

Purity's facade the mask of social amnesia,

but mind can't stop hearing the psalm one tries to deny,

doing best to silence the sounds

by chasing fleeting youth at concrete circus.

 

Echoes haunt from those glimpses into tomorrow serenade

muted by pretense of amnesia over time rendezvous

in the pale palace of withering and wrinkles.

 

 

 

Author notes

Prompt is "Can't stop listening to white houses

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  • chiefmac
    July 1, 2008

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    The first stanza captures the reader from the start with manicured elegance, serenity dwells within this paradise in a chamber of calm-OH how lovely Utophia is. Clad in ashen robes and beg for death dirge, this marks the transition into something less perfect and the palace withering away in wrinkles to bring the reader into the twlight zone. This is compelling and the lines maximize the poems thrust and it fits the target mood.


  • stylization
    July 1, 2008

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    Perfect

    Oh my God. This was absolutly fantastic. I love it to death. The vocabulary was amazing and you took an original take on a difficult prompt. I honestly can't think of any criticism except that it would look better if you hit "enter" twice at the end of the poem, to make it look as though it isn't abruptly stopped by the Author Notes, and to put an endquote on the prompt. But the poem itself is absoutly amazing. Thank you so much for entering and best of luck!