The speculation,
of my mind
hallucination,
fills my eyes.
Hot cherry,
rising smoke,
never ending,
the story goes.
drop and roll,
acidic dream,
beauty fall,
brown eyes gleam.
laugh with all,
crumble beneath,
bloodshot eyes,
and powder teeth.
and so it goes,
day by day,
the story told,
as I decay.
Author notes
"Venom of a thousand needles"
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Comments
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Short, sweet, and simple yet nicely worded. The first stanza is indeed the best of the entire piece, though it continues to intrigue through the entire hing even if the last 2 lines are slightly cliche in one way or another.
Nicely written, nonetheless.
Blessed be.
~Winter~ -
I like how this feels like of quick and frantic. also cool rhyming... especially in the middle.
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I read this a couple of times and i really like it.
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This is excellent.
Try reading it "the" less.
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