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pity not





gild my tongue

plate my words
in precious
metal

ink glides
like honey

drapes page
with voice

that makes
one

finally
pretty

from afar

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  • Auburn Sunrise gold member
    July 17, 2008

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    You are beautiful from any distance or angle, and your words are always breath-taking.

    This has you written all over it - as your voice and style are always so strong and prominently displayed in your poetry - which is, I think, one of the greatest accomplishments of a poet: to develop and showcase your own personal style, set apart from any other.

    You are amazing, as always. Happy to read something newer from you!


  • liltandrhyme silver member
    July 5, 2008

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    Lovely, Leilani! Gorgeous phrasing, I love 'ink glides like honey'.

    In the age of text, email and the 'Social Web', the perception that our written persona is more attractive than the 'real life' one can be very strong.

    Love the opening and closing lines!

    PJ



  • Balldinger silver member
    July 2, 2008
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    gerbils couldn't have found a better basket to weave.


  • Grey
    July 1, 2008
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    Pretty up close, too.