Society is killing our youths equality.
Shoot us clear out of the sky.
The sky, where we make a living to survive.
People say you have parents.
But, our parents can't clear our every need.
Economy is burning our spending money you see.
Gas prices are the weeds of the world
Forcing young girls to mature to be whores
And, guys selling drugs in front of the corner stores.
The pre-answered question people ask is "Why they whores?"
and, see us dealing or consuming around the corner stores.
It's simple
They need to stop asking why we be doing it
Well shit just take a look at the laws
There are way to many clauses against us.
Making us combust into a fiery blaze of illegal stuff.
There no age qualifications to sell that puff puff or some sniff sniff.
Or, take a "ride" in the backseat of a P.O.S
That's what messes our lives up.
Nothing stable to lean on so we just drop.
To get "Knocked-up" or "Knocked-off"
Enough talk
Time to walk
Make a change
It's your right to create a new page
this is history in the making
Rise up and take part in it
Vote for the best person of today
Author notes
Puff puff/sniff sniff: Drugs
Knocked-up: street term for pregnant
Knocked-off: slang term for Killed
P.O.S.: Piece Of Shit
The Sky: refers to the world
Quote:"Don't walk behind me; I may not lead. Don't walk in front of me; I may not follow. Walk beside me that we may be as one." Ute (Native American)
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i love the every first two line its so true and honest " Society is killing our youths equality.
Shoot us clear out of the sky." this happens everyday good wor
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powerful
Great job.
This poem is so true.
It really describes what going on in this world and whats going on around us.
I hope to read more by you.
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so true young people have nothing to live for until you are older.
get subject for a poem idea. You can get every one invold with this sort of poem
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Spending money is something that is a luxury. It's my opinion, that anyone willing to sacrifice their own morals for some "spare" cash has bigger issues than the economy rolling around in their head.
Even in a good economy, most of us do not enjoy the luxury of spending money. Whence was born that evil child named Credit.
I'm not saying that a bad economy doesn't make people ache a little more but really, what good will moral indescrepancies accomplishexcept to drive one closer to self destruction.
There's no satisfaction to be discovered by giving up and failing yourself. Be down, be sad, weep with the lowest of souls... but don't forget how to get up and keep walking with your head held high.
s and best wishes always... ~Genie~
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i love this its so true "There are way to many clauses against us.
Making us combust into a fiery blaze of illegal stuff.
There no age qualifications to sell that puff puff or some sniff sniff.
Or, take a "ride" in the backseat of a P.O.S
That's what messes our lives up.
Nothing stable to lean on so we just drop.
To get "Knocked-up" or "Knocked-off"" great job describing how it feels to be US!!!
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Punching
This the type of poems I really love because describes most of our deep in emotions about the case and also is very concerning because of the reality of your writtings.
"Making us combust into a fiery blaze of illegal stuff". this is my favorite line it shows me a lot of what you felt when writting this,
"Enough talk Time to walk Make a change"
This is so well done its inviting.
This was a very great reading.
so full of truth.
congratulations!
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Interesting
This is true, and it is happening. It depicts the problem of societies, and this poem is fantastic. -
This was really interesting, with a view that I'm sure loads of people can relate to. It's incredibly realistic, and there is so many problems that need to be fixed in the world.
♥
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very realistic..kinda reminds me of marx..proleteriat rise up!,,lol..communism..but yeah..what u say paints a harsh truth..but it is good that there are people who recognize it..nice poem..good luck in the contest
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