Stone folds upon stone
heavy heart
while sea ebbs and flows
her emotion
He will yield
dispersed
transformed
into unknown sands
Author notes
isabellacohen
A contest entry
- QUICKIE: PHOTO Prompt by Lotus-Mama.
475 points, ended June 30, 2008, 19 entries
Honorable mention
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Comments
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Beautiful. Simple, but put together in a nice way, flowing nicely with a great tone to it. Thank you for your lovely entry, and good luck.
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Great, great job! Love this piece! So simple yet elegant. Superb flow! Great job and good luck in the contest
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Hi Isabella,
What profound words! Powerful imagery to convey the essence of humanity and the transpersonal. Incredible skill in the language of words to capture such beautiful arcane knowledge - thank you for helping me to touch that essence - the oneness and clarity of our masculinity and feminity.
Warm wishes,
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thank you
thank you very much,
I must admit, I don't understand your comment fully. what does arcane mean?
I'm glad you saw beauty in my poem,
best wishes,
Isabella -
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Hi Isabella,
I want to acknowlege you in your honesty what you did not understand in my comment!!!!
Arcane broadly means hidden or secret knowledge. This poem clearly shows me that your knowlege of life is born out of your personal experience. You portray a great wisdom and insight. Your use of imagery and metaphor is both intelligent and creative - in just twenty words!!! It is brillant.
Warmest Wishes,
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thanks for helping me understand
I appreciate your comment.
To be honest i can't lay claim to such praise,
I wrote it because it sounded good and i liked the idea of feminine transforming the male in myself.
thanks again,
you are very kind,
Isabella
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now this was beautiful. its like a story in so little lines. Great job! hey and you wrote it the day after my b-day now i like it even more kidding lol.
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Thank you. I am glad you saw beauty in it. A friend once told me that beauty is in the eye of the beholder.
Warm wishes,
Isabella
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....Stone folds upon stone.... what a beautiful image!
I love the idea of the the emotion of the feminine sea.... and its dispersing, transforming effects on him.
This has the meaning of a thousand words, in a mere 20!
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Thank you
Thank you for your comments!!
really appreciate it,
Best wishes,
Isabella
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