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Perfectly Formed ( HM )

Eyes meeting across a car park,

Shyness reaping inwardly hidden,

Faint smile in covered confidence.

 

Silently paused speechless grins,

As the key to music,

Played harmony of memories.

 

Yet a spark...

 

Hands gently caress,

Movement unite passions kiss,

Undress.

 

Candle light flickering dancing shadows,

Painted silhouette of two against a wall.

 

Beauty of night,

Sung soulful,

Lovers finely tuned.

 
Explore the needs to treasure,

Wrapped paper of roses,

Unfurl.

 

 

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The Naughty bug...

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  • Tender wolf gold member
    July 15

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    wow! makes the head spin and the naughty bug bite harderLaughing niaish so much for entering...wow!...lol


  • Abe 1
    July 2

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    WOW ZA ME LADY ! WOW WOW WOW
    Candle light flickering dancing shadows,

    Painted silhouette of two against a wall.

    GOOD LUCK 2 YA IN DE CONTEST
    Abe


  • Roaddog Wolf gold member
    July 2
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    driving around looking for a car park

    what this one has done to me lol, unfurling sensual, sexy


  • LadyDementia gold member
    July 1

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    Someone's in a sexy mood stunningly sensual hun, reads a treat. Imagery is beautifully portrayed. All the best in the contest


  • Angelflower Greeters member
    July 1

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    This was wonderfully sensual and romantic in it's own way.. It read so smoothly.. I really loved it.. You did such a wonderful job.. Best of luck hun..


    Angel

  • imahealer gold member
    June 30

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    This sensual verse took my breath away. This is my dream of the ultimate in the tempting tease before the act. LAst stanza, an very romantic metaphor. ONe question...what is "shy a ness"? Did you do this on purpose? You must make A. one happy man!
    LOve ya sis!
    Linda


  • Swtpoetryman
    June 30

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    I'd wouldn't mind being the rose - if you're the bee - or is it the other way around?

    Candle light flickering dancing shadows,
    Painted silhouette of two against a wall.

    That sounds quite inviting to me after spending all day working me ass off in a chaotic and sweltering factory.


    GOOD LUCK in this contest with this Julie! It was sensual and sweet and fit the background that you picked to a T, too! As always - a winner in my book - any day of the week or time of the day!
    Peace & Love!
    Earl.

    PS - I thought that this was about your gorgeous legs as they are perfectly formed, indeed! HE! HE!


  • jcat gold member
    June 30

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    Filled with such sensuality that it causes a blush to grace the cheeks of the reader. Very well done and best wishes


  • unsigned gold member
    June 30

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    Very sexy sis...I loved it especially the ending..did lots for me being so far away from home...if you know what I mean...yummy!!!


  • storiesuntold gold member
    June 30

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    Oh my goodness

    I almost blushed like watching from behind a curtain this was great honey . WOW
    SAY its finally raining here and lightening so I must get off for a bit but will be back love Patty


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    June 30

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    Again, stunning imagery here Julie. Wonderful piece of writing here. It is powerful, sensual, mildly erotic and written with emotion that really comes through here. I found this a very tender piece too. Good luck in the contest Julie. Well done.

    Darkest
    Love
    Wayne Leon
    x


  • MysticalRayne silver member
    June 30

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    lol I guess so ~ thats ok for some reason I have had the dark bug and it's not mood related. Wonderful piece on first meetings and feeling that first spark ~ loved it !!!!! best of luck in Tender's contest

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