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Starvation

Shining children’s eyes consume all that they see,
Taking the little time they have, spending it on joy.
As solemn vultures hover, countless flies gather,
Rising, swarming, marking diseased inequality.
Various bought politicians, with mouths full,
Argue the fate of their dying dollars,
Toying with obese corporate interests,
Ignorant of common want and charity.
Or the simple fact, as words spew forth;
Night has fallen upon myriad innocent lives.

Author notes

Acrostic: STARVATION
This is my first attempt at an acrostic, so hope this is ok, and that I have not broken any rules regarding their form.

I cannot get rich text to work, so apologies for the small font etc.

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  • Scandalous Beauty
    September 25
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    you gave a very imteresting point of view.

  • Emily Ankrom
    July 29

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    Various bought politicians, with mouths full,
    Argue the fate of their dying dollars,
    Toying with obese corporate interests,
    Ignorant of common want and charity.


    ^^I liked how you used obese interests compared
    to the starving children. It really makes the
    others people sound much more...selfish?

    Ah you speak amazing words.
    I do think the same.

    . Rewarded 6

  • I cried reading this! This poem is so heart filled and sad. We all know there's plenty of food in the world to stop starvation.
  • I really think you did an amazing job with this I am haviong a hard time understanding why so many children in this world go hungry when there is plenty of food that is rather sad to me thanks for sharing much love always

    . Rewarded 4

  • It seems quite wonderful to me. Forms fascinate me as I seldom do them, but you seem to have done this justice and the emotional impact of the poem is unequaled. Good luck in your contest.


  • maralisa silver member
    July 1

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    wonderful acrostic full of such deep emotions on the realitys of the starving millions all over the world thank you for entering the contest and good luck in the contest


    • Dreamana
      July 1
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      TY very much for your kind comment. This is my first acrostic, and was fun as well as being challenging
  • Excellent acrostic, powerfully emotional and incredibly true.
    I love the first line of their eyes consuming all when they are starving, brillant!


    Thank you for your entry in Child Abuse Prevention Contest & Best of luck
    Stay safe
    ~Manda
  • Powerful and so true. While politicians, with bellies full, debate the whys and wherefores of a starving nation, the darkness falls upon another child. Succumbing to malnutrition in a world that has plenty of food to go round for everybody, yet sharing is alien to their natures.

    A very very powerful piece of writing. And so true too. Well done my friend. Good luck in the contest my friend.

    As a footnote, you might find that you will be asked to remove your image. I feel that you need this image, as it stresses on the point of the piece. But, the moderators might ask you to remove. Just be wary my friend.

    Darkest
    Wishes
    Wayne Leon

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