Shining children’s eyes consume all that they see,
Taking the little time they have, spending it on joy.
As solemn vultures hover, countless flies gather,
Rising, swarming, marking diseased inequality.
Various bought politicians, with mouths full,
Argue the fate of their dying dollars,
Toying with obese corporate interests,
Ignorant of common want and charity.
Or the simple fact, as words spew forth;
Night has fallen upon myriad innocent lives.
Author notes
Acrostic: STARVATION
This is my first attempt at an acrostic, so hope this is ok, and that I have not broken any rules regarding their form.
I cannot get rich text to work, so apologies for the small font etc.
A contest entry
- Contest: Child Abuse Prevention - June by Page Shut down.
600 points, ended July 1, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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A wonderfully written acrostic poem!
I read so many articles about food shortages and the potential death of many a few months ago. Sadly, now every magazine I pick up is plastered with pictures and headlines of crooked politicians and proposals for things to tax!
I remember when I was a teenager and the media was really into coverage of the needy. Now, it seems, the world in general has become more aware of what Neighbor 1 and Neighbor 2 have that they don't have than what the poorest among us (and overseas) do not have. I wonder how tall and deep the corruption of first world nations has become, especially when even the criminal politicians don't seem to face the same consequences.
The bigger the pockets of few become, the more widespread starvation will become but when the corruption is so epidemic, it's hard to be optimistic that there will really be an end.
Anyway, sorry for leaving so many thoughts here. You have a really intense, wonderful acrostic poem here.
s and best wishes always... ~Genie~
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Very nice! I never get very far when I try to do acrostics, so I admire this one very much, because not only did it work, but it seemed to flow and be linked together very well. Great job!
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Good
Very well put. The words that you have written appear to be much more then they simply seem to be and it all seems to relate back to the key point. Starvation. I do not believe you are talking about Starvation in the physical act, am I correct? But more in the mental, psycological form. This is a very good write. I do not believe that you have broken any rules regarding the form of this poem, but then again acrostic is not really my style.
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What strikes me most about this poem is the word choice. I like the way it is conveyed and approached, as it is different than layman's terms but not quite too complex to where only English professors can understand it. Nice job and good luck in the future.
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Amazing
Quite poignant and powerful. Beautifully written with wonderful imagery
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you gave a very imteresting point of view.
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Various bought politicians, with mouths full,
Argue the fate of their dying dollars,
Toying with obese corporate interests,
Ignorant of common want and charity.
^^I liked how you used obese interests compared
to the starving children. It really makes the
others people sound much more...selfish?
Ah you speak amazing words.
I do think the same.
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I cried reading this! This poem is so heart filled and sad. We all know there's plenty of food in the world to stop starvation.
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I really think you did an amazing job with this I am haviong a hard time understanding why so many children in this world go hungry when there is plenty of food that is rather sad to me thanks for sharing much love always
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It seems quite wonderful to me. Forms fascinate me as I seldom do them, but you seem to have done this justice and the emotional impact of the poem is unequaled. Good luck in your contest.
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wonderful acrostic full of such deep emotions on the realitys of the starving millions all over the world thank you for entering the contest and good luck in the contest
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TY very much for your kind comment. This is my first acrostic, and was fun as well as being challenging
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Excellent acrostic, powerfully emotional and incredibly true.
I love the first line of their eyes consuming all when they are starving, brillant!
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Thank you for your entry in Child Abuse Prevention Contest & Best of luck
Stay safe
~Manda
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Powerful and so true. While politicians, with bellies full, debate the whys and wherefores of a starving nation, the darkness falls upon another child. Succumbing to malnutrition in a world that has plenty of food to go round for everybody, yet sharing is alien to their natures.
A very very powerful piece of writing. And so true too. Well done my friend. Good luck in the contest my friend.
As a footnote, you might find that you will be asked to remove your image. I feel that you need this image, as it stresses on the point of the piece. But, the moderators might ask you to remove. Just be wary my friend.
Darkest
Wishes
Wayne Leon
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