It came in wincing waves
quietly curtailing expectations
unseen within forward motion;
extended, yet blended abundantly
to what reluctance could carry
should a line be crossed
and chances taken.
Slim the smile that love offers
when unpolished with the gift of heart.
My shoes needed no wear
to become aware of plentiful -
and in it all
truths have been taught
as my lines have turned;
pathways caught and changed for planting.
A contest entry
- when poetry happens by Dienush.
1250 points, ended July 13, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is interesting and, though I can't fully grasp it, I think more than one meaning can be found in it. My favorite part is,
"My shoes needed no wear
to become aware of plentiful - " -
a very clever play on words. The separated line seems to be strong, too. Thanks for your entry
~Diana
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~Diana
Thank you for your kind words. A terrific contest. ~Pamela 
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"It came in wincing waves
quietly curtailing expectations
unseen within forward motion"
Absolutely beautiful work, Pam, as always. This has an almost calming effect to me, and seems like something that would be spoken softly. Wonderful piece.
-Ryan
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Ryan
Thank you much my friend. It is always a pleasure to see your thoughts on my work. Much much appreciated. ~Pamela *wilted _rose*
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Slim the smile that love offers
when unpolished with the gift of heart. = Amazing
Enjoyed the read.
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Mark
Thank you so much. ~Pamela
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Beautiful Pam!
It flows so lovely!
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JustSimply LIssa
Thank you so much. I am pleased you enjoyed this one. ~Pamela
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