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Isolation's Walls

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Mystic rhythms caressing both heart and soul
Connecting ancient forces from within.
Streaming energy flows cutting self-control,
The dancing eyes and sighing breaths begin.
As the smiles of contagion infect akin,
Souls shine in diseased aftermath
From delightfully suffering Eros’ wrath.

Goods of fashion are handed a callous fate,
All textiles cast askew upon floor’s dust.
Love’s compulsion demanding to satiate,
Consumed in flames that burn yet don’t combust.
All the world is forgotten to lover’s lust,
Where streamings of two beings join as one.
Sacred waves prove life’s passion has now begun.

Blissful beauty of living in wondrous dreams
So magnified by sharing all we are.
Ancient music of grunting and primal screams
Announce to all ignition of a star.
Precious gift of conception that's borne afar;
In thanks the muses rain all love and bliss,
As eternity pauses for passion’s kiss.

Sheer exhaustion collecting on nature’s tolls.
Relaxed, skin’s ultra-sensitive to light.
Both collect selfless brilliance their loving souls,
Will radiate throughout the blessed night.
Lovers bathing in embers of pure delight,
As subtle understandings have been reached.
Isolation's walls razed to the ground and breached.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Rhyme Royale.


Lines 1,3,5,7 in each stanza are 3 anapests and an iamb (11 syl), lines 2,4,6 in each stanza are iambic pentameter, or a suitable replacement.

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  • cricketjeff gold member
    July 16

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    Cleverly constructed in one of my favourite forms. With the meter alternating between lines and well done rhyme. With interesting vocabulary.


    Thanks for the entry and please keep coming back in the later rounds
    Jeff and Sue


  • BellaD
    July 6

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    Excellent!

    A well written piece. The meter and rhyme make this delightful to read. Love the final line!
  • well done

    well done, poet. I enjoyed reading this piece.
  • The metre here is very interesting, I think it would be easier for me to read if it were all in tetrameter, my wife says Chaucer reads well that way. However I am here to learn and I shall keep trying. There are some good poems in that contest.


  • Dalaney gold member
    June 30
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    Poetry at its best, Maestro Love, Lane


  • Amera gold member
    June 30

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    Your poetry is wonderful. You have composed a sensuous passionate poem in good taste thus showing true love expressed in physical contact. By using the Rhyme Royal you have added depth and dimension to the image of love. You also rhymed unusual words showing your mastery of the form. In my humble opinion you are the best male poet I know for more reasons than just your poetry.

    Love,
    Amera, your faithful Queen.


  • PoeticLove
    June 30

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    Allan, this is so beautiful, how it makes me wish upon a star, to be loved like this would be life's bliss

    Is there anything that you cannot do, as one of the lovers of olden times, when love was a meaning, I adored the poem, so lovely and true to your heart.

    • Thank you for your kind comment.

      • PoeticLove
        July 3
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        I'm sorry, I really did love the poem, my very favorite thus far, any woman who would be lucky enough to have your love, has a cherished treasure, kind, giving, and ever forgiving.

        This poem is the most beautiful poem I have ever read. love always, Bell x
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