Birds know the secret
every morning
they sing to greet the gold
Men sleep
Flowers know the secret
petals open
faces turn to gold
Most men sleep
But a few
see the silver and gold
burst onto the Earth
we know
it is all
worthwhile
Author notes
45 words on sunrises
A contest entry
- Favorite Things by Pamela A Lamppa.
1200 points, ended July 3, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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There is a striking lack of punctuation in this piece, but since you have used none at all, at least it is consistent.
A sunrise - you have said it all in your last stanza. As beautiful as a sunset, but much harder to catch.
A lovely entry. Thank you. ~Pamela
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Here you have a piece of free verse praised by Lane. What more can I add?
Oh yeah...
Not bad!
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Men have seen both, and know its worthwhile! Such fine words to the ending of this poems! Great penning...~Sie
Good luck in your contest
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You, sir, are simply a marvelous poet. I adore this one. You need to find an agent. Love, Lane
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Well penned
Always amazed
but would rather have
My King of Rhyme over
free verse.
But hey I know what your fans enjoy
So my request will be placed on the back burner
til further notice.
I shall wait somewhere for it
Love Passions
And you know as always you will do
alright in this contest any for that matter
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No trure words were ever spaked! Most men sleep with the TV remote control in their hands. You do very well at free verse.
Love,
Amera♥
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Very Nice!
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