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Beautiful Oblivion.

She suffocates with misery,
Can't take what she feel's within,

She hurts all over again and again,

Searches for her love trapped inside,

Pinned down to the ground,

Nowhere to hide, no place to go,

She's left behind, forgotten and pushed away,

She wonders around,

Seeing memories in forgotten places,

The anger she feel's, the hatred she builds,

Realizing how people truely are,

Hoping to die, wishing for no more lies,

Breaking down in tears,

Please someone help her overcome her fears,

Can't you see what she's going through,

Will you believe what she say's is the truth,

No one knows, no one will ever know,

What she's held inside for many many years,

She's thinking of everything everyone's put her through,

Making her feel oblivious to a beautiful world,

No one notices she has a knife,

Walking out the door,

Step by step there she goes again,

Deep deep into the woods,

Where no one can hear her scream,

She lies beneath the crying sky,

She cries with the lonely clouds above,

Stabbing herself from deep within,

Making a new wound into her chest,

And now a beautiful young girl is tooken out of this beautiful world,

And shes placed into a new home with the one she loved above,

The only one who could understand and help her.

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  • Dovina
    July 1, 2008

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    I noticed a few grammar errors, but that aside, I liked it. It was definitely sad and heart-wrenching. No one understood her, so she does the only thing that she feels would help make her feel better. thanks for your entry.


  • SaviDropKick.Oi.
    June 30, 2008

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    wow!
    this is just beautiful!
    enchanting even!
    breath taking and amazing and enthralling!
    i absolutely love it!!!!!
    omg keep up the great work!
    Love,
    Savi


  • xXundeadXx
    June 30, 2008
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    beautiful

    sorry i dont have much input on this but its truely a beautiful peice. great job.