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Echo of Peace

I love my evening stroll beside the waves,
collecting shells and thoughts along the way;
a daily trek my inner spirit craves,
beside the ocean at the end of day.
With thoughts upon what every sailor braves,
I let the ocean take my mind away.
That’s how I come to tell this tale to you;
about the day a shell came into view.

A perfect shell appeared along the shore
a gift before me from the ebbing tide.
I stooped to rinse it eager to explore,
just why its’ beauty had me mystified.
It spoke to me in words I can’t ignore,
a gentle voice exhaled from deep inside.
Surprised…  I held it closer to my ear
its tone of voice was earnest and sincere.

I listened to the wisdom of the shell;
it told me that I need not walk the beach,
it said I need not ever say farewell
and knowledge that I need the shell will teach.
It told me that my heart will truly tell
that peace and love is well within my reach.
So if I cannot take my walk at all,
I listen to the echo of His call.

 

 

 

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Ottava Rima

Pronouns for God are capitalized in the New King James version of the bible.

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  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    July 10, 2008

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    Yes... this had Gold all over it! Congratulations!

    I admire your faith and the serenity it brings to your spiritual poems! A very gentle touch here that is truely beautiful!


  • echo-ink
    July 6, 2008

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    OOOHHHH WOW!!!

    SOOOOO beautiful, I loved this one, what a brilliant idea, a spiritual echo from a shell, Lovely and such words of wisdom, God can truely be seen and heard from in all things, I loved how you used the sea and the shell and waves, lovely. YAY for Amera


  • HeavensDaughter
    July 3, 2008

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    This was a very enjoyable read. I like the story you tell...and the way you tell it. Beautifully written!

    Congratulations on the Gold!


  • azure85 gold member
    July 1, 2008

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    Very beautiful form and your rhyming is excellent. Such a lovely tale of wisdom from the shell, as the One true voice speaks to you. Thank you so much for your poem!


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    June 30, 2008

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    Very, very, very well done, Sis. Excellent concept, excellent execution.

    (But we have had the conversation about the King James Bible before - the capitalisation of divine pronouns is a convention from elsewhere; what matters, though, is that the capitalisation in this poem is perfectly apt)

    Des lapins pour toi, ma soeur.


  • HaleyMary
    June 30, 2008

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    Beautiful write, Amera. Wonderful poetic flow. I liked the last stanza the best. Especially the part of peace and love. If only more people were to listen to the wisdom of those seashells, eh? Maybe the world could be a more peaceful place. Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest.


  • PerVirtuous
    June 30, 2008

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    This is a wonderful Ottiva Rima used perfectly to tell a story, as is the custom with this form. The language is personal and accessible, and the flow is casual yet dramatic. I love the message that communing with God through nature can be done anywhere at any time, and we would all be wise to remember this message. This work is special because it also shows your playful and yet serious heart. The anthropomorphism of the shell is a brilliant idea. A beautiful work with a lovely message. Kudos and bunnies for you.


  • Faeryn
    June 30, 2008

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    Wonderful! I like this form a lot and you make it seem so simple. The story you tell through the poem is amazing.
    Love,
    Tay


  • Rovingone gold member
    June 30, 2008

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    You always tell such a fine tale in your poetry, Amera. And, you always can capture the rhyme in a classic manner. There just aren't many like you out there.


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    June 30, 2008

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    How lovely. Looks like our pal paulcreates ran and told. LOL

    Very nicely done with this form and in my favorite subject of all time - the sea. So pretty.

    Good rhyme, counts are spot on, meter is nice. This is such an elegant form and the sea is always a lovely topic. Thank you for sharing this. ~Pamela


  • paulcreates silver member
    June 30, 2008

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    Oh wow...I'm going to go get Pam. This is spectacular Amera.
    The lines I liked were L1 - L24


    Paul


  • Dalaney gold member
    June 30, 2008
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    so many words come out of the sea...
    beautifully done, Amera. Love, Lane


  • Sprite silver member
    June 30, 2008

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    I love the idea of the shell speaking to you and teaching life lessons. I especially like the second stanza. It tells the main story of the poem in a beautiful way.
    The flow of this poem is finely wrought and the rhyme quite nice. Good luck in the contest. ~ Joyce


  • cricketjeff gold member
    June 30, 2008

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    Delightful and perfectly formed Ottave Rima chain. The story and the outcome are both charming, great poem


  • sgking123 gold member
    June 30, 2008

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    excellent

    ECHO of CALL..the concept itself is highly romanticized and emotionally charged.This gives a feeling of a loved one...echoing the relation,attachment and the bond that is either about to get attenuated or broken.Please apply your words to such a situation and you would have a perfect piece of poetry. Very nice read that carried vivid imagery. Keep it up.Visit some of my poetry as it roves like hell in these directions.These lines were my favorite:

    I listened to the wisdom of the shell;
    it told me that I need not walk the beach,
    it said I need not ever say farewell
    and knowledge that I need the shell will teach.


  • BlueOasis
    June 30, 2008

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    this is a good peace. i love the imagry behind your words. very nice very nice. i hope you do well in the contest.

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