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On Monday, She brushes my Hair

 

 

 

She has the eyes of a knowing angel
dusted fingers and wings that span my mind

 

i have fallen from grace several years gone

moments carry today & many a favour

have been pulled from feathers and stones

 

she changes her halo

for a hat; slightly jaunty and silly

with a smile that melts soft tissue

and hardened nail beds

 

places my head

in her lap- soothes this fevered chasm

 

feel the presence of ethereal dreams

days meander

& nights suddenly don't feel                       so black

 



 

 



 

 

 

 

Author notes

for Suzi - suzanne dia my soul sister and dearest friend.... I love you

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  • Pearl
    July 5
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    fantastic

    Your poem to your friend is just fantastic .Loved cross roads
  • Pearl
    July 5
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    Great

    I really liked this .You did paint a lovey picture .

  • Suzanne Dia gold member
    July 1

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    This is a sigh and a half, my Gilly.

    Someone sees me as an angel, and that is a comfort to me, really. We've both fallen from grace a time or 12, and I am glad we understand each other, and why we take the risks that we do and have.



    Just revisiting this, it is good for my little soul.

  • Lucy. gold member
    July 1

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    Sigh

    Yes, very, very beautiful.


  • Night Hope gold member
    June 30

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    Both poems are quiet, quite lovely & soothing, Gill...yours & Suzi's...what a tribute to a woman's strength you both are. May your sorrows pass soonest with a whisper you can barely hear...


  • Cannonsfire silver member
    June 30

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    You paint her perfect white and pure with such love and emotion, I see she was moved, and how could anyone not be Love, C


  • fortyninereasons silver member
    June 30

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    Comfort angels come in many forms, I am so pleased you have many Gil. Juls


  • Thoughts-of-Soloman gold member
    June 30

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    An angel indeed!

    And wonderfully appreciated here, it's so good to read this from you.

    Should 'hats' be 'hat's' or 'hat'...
    don't mind me, I am a bit of a 'hatter', after all.


  • ArtFullyMe gold member
    June 30

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    "i have fallen from grace several years gone"

    only in your mind... outside of it, the view is much different..

    Suzi is wonderful.. yes
    and wonderful that you...can allow yourself to be comforted..


  • Elora Danon gold member
    June 30

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    This has taken my breath away. I'm left a bit speechless and adrift so I'll just say beautiful - just like you & Suzi.


  • Rowan gold member
    June 30

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    That first line swept me away...
    this is soooo good, hon.


  • zochit2me gold member
    June 30

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    Oh what I wouldn't give to have that special bond you share with her. She is such a lovely gift to everyone she touches as are you Gill. I do not personally know what you are going through but so know it is like a ship being tossed about at sea. You write with such sadness these days so I am sure it is relationship related...I could be wrong and if I am , please accept my appology.  But in any case it is always nice to see you writing, because  it heals the soul...mine as well as others and hopefully yours.

     

    *hug*

    *love*

    *hug*

     

    ☼Becky☼ 


  • Suzanne Dia gold member
    June 30
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    Crossroads

    The road splits jagged,
    like paper torn too hastily

    Rains confetti
    that litters fence posts
    once significant
    of an unwavering eye

    This storm
    has finally
    ended its stalemate
    with inertia.

    Beneath liquid lace
    that shelters blue from sun
    she stands firm.

    Ahead -- fog
    Behind -- A bridge carries a torch
    that eventually flames planks
    into a melting pot
    of history & past -

    Reconciled.

    For now,
    she gathers light to solar plexus
    waits for momentum to find her feet
    that she may step forward into a tomorrow
    that finally holds promise.




    Wrote that for you on Saturday. It isn't as much as I would like it to be, but it is a start.

    I love you too.


    • NurseChilly gold member
      June 30
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      that is so damned beautiful!!! - thank you my girl

      and yes, we share such love ... and it all holds promise
      i know this

      it is more than a start


      • Suzanne Dia gold member
        June 30
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        hehe, still editing. I didn't have a comp when I wrote it, and it is such a royal asspain to edit on paper!

        I think it is done now, and it is yours

  • Nicolette gold member
    June 30

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    This is a lovely dedication and a most beautiful, poetic thank you note to Suzi, Gilly.

    We all need a lap like she's given you and you've expressed this so softly.... i see light here too.



    ~ Nicolette


    • NurseChilly gold member
      June 30

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      it fits for you too my dear friend, as you always offer me a place of safety to which my unsteady ship of late, docks in and moors the rigging of my soul

      i love you very much

      • Nicolette gold member
        June 30
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        I know about unsteady ships too, and when mine was out on the stormy sea, you were there for me too. And I'm here for you...anytime.

        Love you, my friend

  • apples fell gold member
    June 30

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    jaunty. I remember reading something in your comments on your other poem about how Suzanne held your head in her lap. Or was it her who placed her head in yours? I can't remember. Anyways, what a beautiful person to be there for you. Sometimes we don't need a blood sister to gain a life one. This is really fine work Gillian. Can't think of anything that stuck me as odd. I am very glad to see this has a more uplifting quality. It seems like it is at peace, for good or for bad. Poetry is about expression and you always do this poem thing well. I did find one nit, how about "and suddenly night", night suddenly sounds awkward at the end.

    Love you girl. So much.

    ;


    • NurseChilly gold member
      June 30
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      love you too.. will give you a tinkle soon for a chat, maybe tonight if i get chance. but will be soon

      say hi to kenny and suzi held my head metaphorically the other day.. but i did hold her, for real when i was in Louisianna.. its a sharing thing

      and yes.. she knows how to keep me level too..

      as do you.. so thank you my dear friend and diamond shiny geezer

      • apples fell gold member
        June 30
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        Goodies. I can't wait to chat again. It feels like forever the tele rang and you were on the other end.

        I'll tell him hello. He just ran up to pittsfield to get some movie from blockbuster he wants to see...LOL. I swear we could live on those things if plastic gave us sustenance...

        And you are very welcome. I see that you have already made changes while I was commenting before. The ending now is perfectly fine. It wasn't like that while I was commenting.

        Love you lots!


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