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VoDkA hUgS...


Vodka Hugs & Razor Kiss's
Theses Are The Things
This Lonely Girl Miss's


A Smile Outside
With A Tear On Her Cheek
Only Proving,
She's Truely Weak


Can't Face The Past
And Never Will
She'll Merely Sit
In Her Corner, Still




Drinking, Starving, Cutting Away
There nothing more For Me To Say...

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  • my imaginary friend
    August 18, 2008

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    oh wow, this is a very powerful piece. You have a beautiful way of writing and the effect of capitalising every word is excellent. This is dark and to the point and I love it, very well written. I felt I knew exactly what you mean but I most likely don't well done


  • daddy joker
    July 7, 2008

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    this is a good write but cutting never takes the pain away only makes it worst drinking the pain away last for a few hours always comes back never to esacpe it untill you face it i give you probs stoped cutting i never cut but i bet it fells like something whean you do but that one line is all you need to end ur life and for what no really good rason never a good reason to cut are sucide probs to you let your soul bleed on pen and paper not your flesh and skin take care


  • BeautifullyBroken88
    July 5, 2008

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    Wow!! I haven't been on here in ages!! And I now know how much I've missed poetry this intense. I too miss the fact that I wanna cut. I sit there some days in the bath wishing I could just do the one line, but then I think to myself, No! I'm better than that...I need to be strong. So I have. Instead I just get pissed up more often.
    All in all amazing write/read. Well done! Great work!

    BB88 x x


    • hopelessly-broken
      July 6, 2008
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      thanks alot...
      i hate thinking about cutting, like not necessarily wen somthings on ur mind, o somethings rong, but u just think about it. think about doing it... u no? hmm anyway i am so proud u havent! coz u r very strong! and i have alot of respect for u

      lub always HB
      xoxox

  • Hovels 2
    July 5, 2008

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    I don't know why but I love when people say things like this:
    "Vodka Hugs & Razor Kiss's"
    ...in poems. I don't know. It's like a sarcastic way of putting things. I like it.


  • MetalHouse III
    July 2, 2008

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    very sad my dear, but may i advise tequila?:"Tequlia it makes you happy, oh con tequila makes you feel fine"-terrorvision.
    I liked the simplistic rhyme lines almost as if it were a nursery rhyme.


    • hopelessly-broken
      July 2, 2008
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      thanks alot for commenting...
      iv never actually tried tequila, im much more a vodka girl =]

      luv HB
      xox


  • Hidden
    June 30, 2008
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    wow, great work. i really love it.


  • XxX-Ivy-Love-XxX
    June 30, 2008
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    oh wow i really love this! great great great work!!

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