Round and round
and round we go,
the more we learn
the less we know.
Round and round
and round go we,
the more the need
the less we see.
Round and round
then round once more,
the cost of freedom?
...Blood and war.
Round and round
without an end,
we've made a mess,
let's not pretend.
Round and round
and round again,
solutions, please,
for hunger, pain?
...Round and round
and round we go,
the more we learn
the less we know.
Author notes
Well, at least I had a go!
A contest entry
- What Makes the World Go Round-The Poetic Bandits by PhoenixFaith.
1000 points, ended July 12, 2008, 11 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Likeable!
Interesting form that has a dark thought to it, the absolute insanity that this world contains. I wish you well in the contest.
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I'm just in love with the first/last stanza (the repitition is amazing) - I can hear it being chanted in a singsong way - it brings a kind of chilling vision of children in the future singing about the folly of our times (just like children now sing of the bubonic plague and such) - the middle stanzas of your poem bring honesty to the table in an almost mocking way kind of like you are shaking your head at what is happening and just want it to end - best of luck in the contest!
Keep writing
Polly
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I just love your little playful poem with so much truth in it.
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i like how this has a sing-song feel to it. i love the beginning and the ending. this is a great poem. thank you fpr sharing your talent with us. keep writing! God bless you always
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Oops I already commented, it is still great
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This poem give one pause to consider your words. Your opening verse is great!
Round and round
and round we go,
the more we learn
the less we know.
This seems to be more true each passing day. Well Done!
Bandits Rock
Dennis
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It certainly seems this way. A poem to ponder. Good rhyme, too.
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ah how very nicely written, you truely have talent, this is so much like society today and you've captured it in this lovely rhyme. nice write
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A very nicely written piece you have here dear poet. The rhyming and the flow are right with each other and that is one of the important things. A very interesting take on the prompt. good luck and thanks for entering.
Always write from the heart
Never give up
Kate -
This is a fine write!
Hey...what U talking' 'bout girl? This is good. Unfortunately the wrong things from His perspective have the world in a spin! Your right about that. He holds the universe & world in place & we spin in our tracks, racing & pacing to nowhere. I like this. All the best in the contest. 
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Great write and true words. People have made a mess. Enjoed reading your write. Thanksfor your comments on my too.
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