Your words cut me deep
Rip my heart into pieces
Make my smile fade away
Into the depth of nothingness
My soul floats away
In the lake of tears I cried
Carrying the light that kept me alive
Leaving your words to burn my heart
Behind my façade
That mask of giggles and joy I wear
Is the reality engulfed in lies
A nightmare I’m trapped in
When I look into
The crystal clear waters
I see a reflection
I can no longer recognize
No matter how much I try
To get rid of your presence
I simply can’t
Because you’re a dear friend
Who’s made a difference in my life
And someone who just
Utters careless words unintentionally
Without knowing they hurt too bad
A contest entry
- Unusal Pic Prompt IV by Carolina Moon.
450 points, ended July 3, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Yep...
People say shit just to say it...and it destroys you sometimes; especially when it's someone you care about. Very unique take on that picture...I would have pulled something different, but I can see where yours fits. Absolutely well written as usual.
"My soul floats away
In the lake of tears I cried
Carrying the light that kept me alive
Leaving your words to burn my heart"
Some of your best 4 lines ever written. Amazing.
Another hit here...I love this poem. Never EVER stop writing. 9/10!
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Great words. Extremly descriptive with lots of feeling. Simply perfect. Please continue to write.
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Wow, the imagery is incredible. I really enjoyed this piece. Great write!
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It's only my opinion, but the first 4 stanzas seem to have made the poem.. which is wonderful. Thank you so much for your entry.
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First four stanzas lovely.
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wow...amazing work!! funny how all your poems relate to me =P do i inspire you? hahaha. its amazing how we never know how much our words hurt until we spew them out and see the expression on their faces..."oops" doesn't cut it.
we'd deal with these people because theyre our friends...it's our "job". great work once again =) -
Such a sorrow filled piece, beautifully expressed emotions here. People don;t always realise the hurt they cause. Good luck in the contest
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This is fantastic. i fell in love with it such a beautiful piece that touched my heart
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