nothing alive
alone at last
feeling my breathing
its coming so fast
I hate these emotions
controlling my life
haunting and taunting
persuading the knife
I love you so much
like I always did
I've longed for your touch
since i was a kid
how did it end
where did I go wrong
this question it haunts me
these feelings so strong
to see you happy
would make my life
so do what you do
and I'll continue my strife
Author notes
Emotion~Overrated~Underappreciated~Overwhelming
urapns66
A contest entry
- 1/4 ♥ Round 'N' Round I Go by as.phy.xi.ate..
300 points, ended August 22, 2008, 18 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Comments
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It flows so well I love it!! I love the scheme and the subject and EVERYTHING! Awesome write!!! Good Luck!
~Katie -
i love this.
<3 caressa. (i was on your computer.... -
hey! nice write! man, you are amamzing! sorry it took so long to comment (was in Cali until today) keep up the great stuff!
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