Convulsive thoughts cut,
down to crumbled bone.
Pulsating round minds,
to a heart of stone.
Patiently I wait,
For skies to unseal,
Sending the blood
before it congeals.
Innocents slayed,
without remorse.
Bitter lives taken
with brutal force.
Drench me wholly
let purity flow.
Delight in the power,
it does bestow.
Author notes
Picture Prompt;
Picture credit: Darkness 2 by ~sa-cool
May well edit this before closing, some parts I'm not happy with.
A contest entry
- Come Join The Dark Side by Re-invention.
1376 points, ended July 17, 2008, 18 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Well written piece here
This was penned very well keep writting and good luck in the contest
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WEll holy hot salsa!!!!
This has an impact! The diction, is so dark, and carefully crafted. And the rhyme only makes it stronger 
. I enjoyed this very much. I wish you all the best in the contest!
~Pt
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excellent dark writing here..my dark reflection
and tight rhyme as per usual
Cind
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This is a great piece of work. How could you ever think of editing it? It's already wonderful.
Good luck in the contest!
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i think this DOESNT need editing... just my opinion tho...... thanks for entering and good luck in this contest.....!!!!!!!!!!1
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you did an excellent job on this... expecially in the rhyme schemes.. really great... you did add some light in the end but still I liked it so no need for editing that part unless you;re unhappy with it.. great job!
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This is so perfect for that pic!! Let the purity flow and the power!!! This is a seeping kind of evil here.. that is chilling.. it kinda just gets under your skin!!
Love this!!!
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curiouser and curiouser Aaron says as he travels further down the rabbit hole, i love this poem, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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http://sa-cool.deviantart.com/art/Darkness-2-90219404
here is your pic prompt good luck in the contest....! and thank you for entering...! -
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Awesome picture, thanks
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i look forward to your amazing entry! just posted mine
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I'm waiting for a pic still
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boo
...I wanted to read your amazing darkness soon lol
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i look forward to it my dark spirit
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Wheee me me :D makes me smile :) lol
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Lol.. good stuff
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