Sour kissed;
I moved through the hallway,
caressing darkness that flew past my figure.
Each corner staring
at my scarlet gown,
warning me not to head
into our bedroom.
Ready as ever to fixate
on your touch,
denial captivates me into a dream
and I wander into
a lonely memory,
only to gaze at my own shadow
along the wall.
Another regret falls
behind the amber nightstand,
as I looked next to me
where the empty bed cries
in sorrow for your absence
once more.
A contest entry
- The sadness has consumed me and now I see nothing else... by Leanna-bean.
475 points, ended July 1, 2008, 14 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
let the imagery embrace your soul
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I totally could see the scene when I was reading this...amazing
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ooh, that was a touching one, well written and great imagery
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Kerri this was amazing! When you sit down to read it it kind of started out like a poem where she was going to find her loved one with another, but then the emptiness surrounding her shouts out that she is forever alone.
Powerful use of imagery, I loved the picture you painted with words absolutely stunning!
Keep it flowing!
Always,
Tati
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i thought it was a 'cheating' poem too at first.
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Wow...this is amazing. It actually really hits close to home. I feel like this everyday.
"where the empty bed cries
in sorrow for your absence"
I really liked that...Thank you so much for your entry and good luck!
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kerri. i love this one. yes yes. <
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what the hell. i didn't know hearts didn't work here. buhhh. boooo.
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there is a certain way to do them but i forgot how
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That's all right. I might be able to do without them, even though I use them alll the time
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makes the heart * love * no spaces
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? thank you.
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God! I'm so feelin this right now.
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