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Confessions

Slow and painfully suffocating
overwhelmed by unrelenting emotions

my own deceit scoring me from the inside
as thoughts ravage my mind in an infinite succesion

My eyes bleed the sorrows of my heart
each drop a regret, an unanswered wish
while my voice echoes the depth of my pain
as I sob my confessions into the pillow

In a list

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  • Shrat
    September 8, 2008

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    This is really cool. It doesn't rhyme, but it givesthe illusion that it does somehow. The point is a good one, I'm sure a lot of people can relate to that. It's beautiful, nice job!


  • The Drifter
    August 14, 2008
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    Confessions

    For every act there is a price--Ask youself is it worth the price.
    Good write


  • Chaena
    July 4, 2008
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    (speechless) (with tears)

    This is amazing.
    BEAUTIFULLY written.
    I can relate to this so much.
    Thank you.


  • Neet
    June 30, 2008

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    Lyrical

    It has lyrical feel to it, like goth rock song. Interesting work.Smile


  • ellaelu
    June 30, 2008
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    awww sad.. a lot of emotion. I think you did good. Probably something many can relate to.


  • SilverWolf
    June 30, 2008
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    wow ! awesomeness!


  • FelineMuse
    June 30, 2008

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    I like the dramatic description in the line "My eyes bleed the sorrows of my heart"


    Spelling/grammar suggestions:
    *decete=deceit
    *ravenge=Ravage
    *a infinite=an infinite
    *a unanswered=an unanswered
    *echos=echoes


    • amanda vampiress
      June 30, 2008
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      Thank you for the spelling grammar suggestions! I was in such a hurry to get the poem submitted before I fell asleep that I didn't catch them.


      • FelineMuse
        June 30, 2008
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        You're very welcome. Sometimes our fingers are less nimble than our minds. Ah, the curse of genius.


  • Jade.Butterfly gold member
    June 30, 2008

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    WHOA!!

    My friend i think you need a friend to talk to..
    I liked this very much, i have told my confessions to my pillow many of times..Hehehe..
    You did a great job here..
    Keep up the good work!!

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