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The Story of Bean and Egg

They met at a denny's table...
but prepare yourself for no ordinary fable.
He was a coffee bean, mysterious and smart,
she was an egg who smelled like a fart.
Her little red bow hung down from her shell.
Was he looking at her, she just couldn't tell!
She rolled to position away from his eyes.
Holding her menu up like some sort of disguise.
Her little feet tapped, and yes she has feet.
Anxious and waiting for them finally to meet.
He sipped his latte and took a deep breath.
And soon egg was jittering like she was on meth.
His feet pitter pattered along the linoleum floor.
Egg contemplated running straight for the door.
Knocked on her shell keeping her yolk in check.
Feeling nausea OMG maybe she should hit the deck.
His tan, smooth skin illuminated in the dim light.
Caught a scent of coffee that gave him a fright.
Omelettes basking on the stove in the back...
waiters did ponder if they were on crack.
The little egg blushes yellow, her yolk did gush.
Little did the coffee bean know, she already had a crush.
He stood quiet boldly at the end of her chair...
a scent caught his attention and his nostrils did flare.
Excused him self a moment to check his underwear.
He reassured himself and headed towards the door.
Tripped on his shoes and fell to the floor.
His white shiny teeth shined towards the table little egg sat.
In shock and disbelief he couldn't ponder where she was at.
His walked closer in hopes she went to the bathroom
Sat waiting and wondering looking over her costume.
As he flipped the menu page a note fell at his feet.
He held his face in his hands as he read of her retreat.
As much as this egg had a crush on the bean.
Her self conscience scent of a latrine.
Made her run away from any chance they had.
Well as you guess our little coffee bean was sad.
But vowed to find this egg and ask for her hand.
He rode in his cup mobile all over the land.
Putting up posters, and handing out wanted ads.
Knocking on all homes asking mothers and dads.
This little bean was flustered and oh so distraught.
Maybe the egg didn't like him as much as he thought.
So in his defeat he went back to where they met.
Sipping his latte just praying to forget.
He searched the room with his eyes...
A look of shock silenced his cries...
A round little darling eating pancakes.
Upon sight of this beauty his little heart aches.
He stood again in boldness and in fear...
"Excuse me miss, is anyone sitting here?"

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It's about Me Eggeh, And Fulabeans now known as sadistik on Ap. So it fits I promise

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  • Im-not-broken
    August 22
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    this is nice
    good luck in my contest!

  • JustSimplyLissa gold member
    August 22
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    lol this is awesome! its too cute! Haha! Made me giggle quite a few times!


  • Titus gold member
    August 22
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    I bet you'd brighten up a Nero of Pret A Manger any day, this is an almost every day scenario, the metaphors of bean and egg are enlightening, and it is very nice to know of your existence to understand it even further. I really feel like a nice fry up somehow, and will make lovely reading again while eating it.
    The story revolving around it, is as cute as Beatrix Potter. Nice One Tony


  • PsychoKilla
    August 3
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    awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww it's so cute ahaha

  • hahaha this was great holly. it made me smile and it was rather so whimsical and fun that it was hard to see the heartache that was there but it was there and that made this wonderful. Its like a tim burton movie where instead of using dark themes to illustrate love you used lighthearted themes to illustrate heartache awesome job babe!

  • An interesting little tale and if you are referring to the Denny's restaurant, you will need to capitalize Denny's.

    I didn't quite see where it fit to the prompt but I loved your well done rhyme and the story. Nice work. Best of luck in the judging. ~Pamela


  • Blue Rew silver member
    July 14

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    Very whimsical tale! Quite a wonder that all
    this was made to rhyme too! It doesn't have
    very much to do with the given theme, but
    it certainly did give me a smile or two. Blue

  • FransB silver member
    July 14
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    I tried,

    but could not link what you have presented to that of the expectations of the contest. Frans

  • Winklings gold member
    July 14

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    I am non-plussed.

    Who is the donkey? Who is in love? The images do not relate to the contest, it seems. Thank you for this entry.
    Lyndon of the Winklings.
  • This is a very funny poem. It rhymes well from beginning to end. It is quirky and orignal. If there is ever another like it, I will know they copied you.

    I read it twice and I am still grinning.

  • Great i liked this
  • Ahh, I loved this. It made me laugh very much. Funneh
  • lol i loved it great rhyme and the flow was right on also you did a great job hun, you want me to put the bean in check for you ?

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  • Nephlim
    June 30

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    Aw!!!! Mommy, this is too cute! . I loved this love story and you told it really well, silly, loving, emotional, sweet, all of those things . And it had a good flow to top it all off . Better than Cat in the Hat
    GREAT job
    diggin it majorly

    . Rewarded 6

  • great write lil daughter keep penning on and on and on and onon and on and on and onon and on and on and onon and on and on and onon and on and on and onon and on and on and onon and on and on and onon and on and on and onon and on and on and onon and on and on and onon and on and on and onon and on and on and onon and on and on and onon and on and on and onon and on and on and onon and on and on and onon and on and on and onon and on and on and onon and on and on and onon and on and on and onon and on and on and onon and on and on and onon and on and on and onon and on and on and onon and on and on and onon and on and on and onon and on and on and onon and on and on and onon and on and on and onon and on and on and onon and on and on and onon and on and on and onon and on and on and on
    love your MAMA

    . Rewarded 8


  • Dmonik
    June 30

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    LMFAO!
    This was awesome. Hilarious, witty and easy to read.
    Well done Eggeh, and I wish you and The Bean, all the best
    Bravo!!

    'D'

    . Rewarded 4


  • NyteShade
    June 30

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    lmfao! that was so fricken funny. I could tell this was about you and Dustin, it was hard not to miss lol. I also thought it was so damn cute!

    Nicely done eggeh

    . Rewarded 4


  • Sadistik
    June 30

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    AWE!!

    I love it Holly thank you I espesially LOVE the cup mobile... the rhyme and flow were spot on and I love denny's too so....big plus!!! I haven't commented on any of your poems but I promise that over the next few day O will comment them all . Thank you so much fr this it means so much to me and it is great for a laugh

    love ya
    -Dustin-


  • cute

    and really well written.


  • Salt Therapy
    June 30
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    jajajaja cute rofl. now you have to add me to this meal.
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