Sensei teaches
to leap at luscious
strawberries, hung
upon precarious
vine.
He lunged;
I observed.
In a list
A contest entry
- Quickie - PIF- 15 poets x 15 words by Cannonsfire.
1750 points, ended June 30, 2008, 12 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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excellent / also
so many unanswered questions / koans be like that.lol
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Short and sweet. Very nice poem. It's a little weird in the ending. :/ But that is my own feelings. But you deffinitly deserved the trophy you got. Keep on writing young cicada... okay old cicada haha jk jk Sorry, but still. Keep on writing.
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Did he do any spectacular backflips mid-air, using his cane to snap the fruit free into the air and before landing gently ease it down his left elbow to his shoulders past his neck and then into his right hand?
That would be cool.
Write on. One.
Dez
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Yeah, something like that. Always spectacular.
'cept strawberries don't grow on trees, lol.
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Very well deserved for the trophy
Ruby
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Wow! A wonderful piece!
Congrats on your wonderful shiny(
Gaylene
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Exciting write...Deserved your bronze in the contest!
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oh cool!!!!
love this!!!!!
~all my best!!
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S.P.
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Oh, I just loved this!
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Love the feeling of 'wax on wax off' in this lol. Great job.
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It has.
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