Thoughts wove
baskets not linear
to hold the company
of meaning,
spoken and felt
we filled them,
as we helixed.
Funny;
the biggest mystery
drank its own coffee,
tasting itself alive
in a smile,
merely evidenced
by travellers
both guests and hosts,
moved into its life
on given dazzling steed.
Words which remain
true faces,
while our mirrored
garden table
adopted its role as
a blinding landing pad!
Not passing time
but non-return journey;
un-hearing, more
one's real name,
is impossible once heard.
Author notes
Dedicated in thanks to a most special and inspirational friend of mine, I met here, ArtFullyMe.
One day I hope the 'coffee in the garden' might happen.
A contest entry
- Dedications by LionessK.
600 points, ended July 12, 12 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Welcome any sincere response and critique
Comments
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Wonderfully creative and well written. A beautiful dedication. Thank you so much for sharing, and for entering my contest.
Keep the inspiration flowing.
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So, so pleased to have won a Gold for this!
Thank you so much Kristy, I'm chuffed to pieces!
Muchly appreciated.
Sol
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I hope it happens, too...
we all have that one special
person we would love to spend time
with...if only. This poems feels
full of life. I like it.
Love, Lane
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simply stunning my dear friend.. so very very touching and you've captured the essence of her nature and the nurturing you offer
big heart you... yes
love it
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She is lovely and beautiful. I think if we all keep dedicating poems to her, we should start referring to her as goddess, literally...
She does so many sweet things for people on here. And she's so damn kind to me and Kenny...Has always been. I absolutely loved this entire poem. I'm not really up for critical critiques at the moment. Been slacking on those quite a bit, but even if I was, I don't think there is much here that I would find wrong. The one thing I will mention is I think the beginning is a little rough...It just seems a little edgy for a beginning. It's probably the wording in the first two lines and the last one that makes me feel this way. All in all this is excellent writing Sol. You are such an emerald. 
And liza, well she's amazing and there is no jewel I can think of that does her justice.
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awww....truly lovely!
i've always wondered too...if i were to throw a garden
party....and each poet did appear...wouldn't it be lovely
and awesome to finally see their souls in the flesh
standing before us.
WE hear hearts and thoughts without the presence of
physical image.
Truly freeing indeed.
Lovely writing Sol!
take good care
ears/Seattle
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... You too ears!
Thank you
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What a lovely dedication to your friend Sol. best of luck in the contest
Ruby
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Thank you Ruby
Sol
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thank you so very much...
I love this...
those first lines, the non-linear baskets, wonderful, wonderful.... !
and the mysterious drinking coffee. the way you've woven the words, the images, it is like being in a magical garden..
and then that last stanza.. beautiful thoughts....freedom.. and so much more..
I am so very honored.... not to mention slightly tongue-tied
but I will return.. when I am less overwhelmed ..
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thank you....
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Much my pleasure, I'm so pleased that you like it and thanks again for your inspiring this and also the sentiment this response came from.
Heh'... don't feel banned from suggesting any improvements... as always, I would love you too, if and when they occur to you.
My thanks to you.
Sol
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Wonderful!! She'll love it.X
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