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No God Shall Save Us

Missing image
Thrown out of heaven, Angels decay,
Not pure enough so I got thrown away,
This burning inferno on my head,
Addictive Sins, There's nowhere to fled,

Volcanic Fire erupting above,
from all the stress, and neglect of love,
Ashen Wings Entangle with Vines,
so I Can't fly, Vines making Spiralling lines,

Gripping my legs, like Sharpened knives,
cutting deep Into my flesh, will I revive?
Slowly, Viciously creeping, stalking my body,
painting closer hoping to embody,

Skin is Swelling, dripping my essence,
In the dark It's as if its luminescence,
thorns like needles cascading inside,
Bewitching pain, screams and tears collide,

Faith is lost no room to hide,
Most of the Blood has now dried,
I am Sat here wasting away,
Bound by Vines, No more room to pray,

No god shall save you now, I'm lost to all,
Bound in victimized Shackles, Can't even Crawl,
Remember me when you pray,
Hope all you want, no god will save you anyway...

Author notes

hope its ok, my muse is active tonight!

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Comments

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  • Wow the last line was amazing "no god shall save you" Great job. :]
    Lovers it lotzzz
    love.
    Shell
  • Well!

    I feel like I fell down again. Ha.. Prima!
  • Ohkay, so I have officially become a fan of your poetry. Forizzle. haha.

    "Gripping my legs, like Sharpened knives,
    cutting deep Into my flesh, will I revive?
    Slowly, Viciously creeping, stalking my body,
    painting closer hoping to embody"


    WOW. This is INCREDIBLEEE. This was so deep and full of vivid imagery. And the BACKGROUND? Seeing this reminded me of a video game my brother used to play...hahaha. This is excellent, powerful, vivid, amazing, wonderful, fantastic, and any other adjective that basically relates to the same
    Much lovvve

  • "No god shall save you now, I'm lost to all,
    Bound in victimized Shackles, Can't even Crawl,
    Remember me when you pray," Are you fucking kidding me? This was fantastic, like actually when I read those lines I gasped. Now, I am not a fan of rhyme at all, at all at all but for some reason your poetry it speaks volumes to me. Thank you for this.
    xxx
    -Rodwen

  • Wow this is good. I like this one a lot. Really neatly written. THanks so much for sharing. It was a job well done. Keep it up!

    THE LESBIAN!!

  • wow.. great capture on prompt.. I love whow you understood the meaning of no light and how you use that light to turn it opposite.. great job.. this is marvelous!
  • This is awesome hunni, full of bleak despair and pain. Love how you've portrayed the pic, the imagery is stong and so raw! Superbly penned, good luck

  • wow i really really liked this.... great job..... in one of the lines tho you say I am Sat here wasting away,
    should be im sitting here wasting away....? anyway great job.... also love the background......!

    thanks for entering and good luck in this contest!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
  • oh well damn this was really good...i liked the entire dark vibe it gives off i think you did an amazing job with this!
    all my love and best of luck!
    NeeCee


  • LadyDementia gold member
    June 30
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    Awesome pic, can't wait to read
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