The blackness is hidden within my soul opening every wound,
I can hear you calling to me!
Download your dreams on the web of life?
Disruption is and will be yours,
Transfer your body into the Web,
And onto the flight path I will send you,
To Germany, Malta, Belgium, France and Australia,
And transform you into a Vampire,
Living off the blood of others,
And Then reward you!
With the keys to the ultimate power of the darkness,
So are you ready to fly with me?
And transform your being into a Vampire of lust?
Killing and Maiming until this world is of dust!
Permanently keeping but not running away,
Will you start up a new War where all humans pay?
So choose who you follow!
And lets never be apart,
Death is only for the Mortals,
But they can't tell us apart,
Author notes
I tried my best to use at least a few "big words" and metaphors. "BIG WORDS" were a bit of a new frontier for me. I mostly try to keep it simple..
But you have to branch out every now and again, Don’t you = P
Picture Prompt credit: http://amelllia.deviantart.com/art/DARK-44213039
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Comments
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well the write is very expresive a little lack of metaphors and I also noticed you didn't place the prompt on the author notes and I suggest that you please do so... this piece kind of made me feel and think of Twilight series. which is something I indeed enjoy thinking of... great job!
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nice write and very dark sided.... great write. thanks for entering contest.. and good luck in this contest...!
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Wow, deeply dark and so awesome, neat treat to read. Good luck in the contest
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wow you wrote that really fast lol.
yay Malta!!!!! *I'm Maltese
few things....I don't like all the capping....it distracts me from your piece, i think it'll be stronger if you get rid of capping every line...but that's my personal opinion
also, last line: *cant* should be *can't* ...fyi
all my best !!!
~Sailor Ptolema
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fixed CANT 2 Can't ... Thank you for telling me.
Ps,
Nice looking kid, just like his or her Mum. x
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