Sympathetic & apologetic;;
the only words to describe our bedraggled actions
The harmful and autistic secrets
Prolonging the endless contradictions
A tragedy from the beginning;
The choice of turning away a chance at amenity
I dived in for the mistake...
I gave in to my heart's desire
Temptation dawdles in your fingers
Dangling slowly up and down my trembling arm
Life holds these contemptuous possibilities
Though we never really meant any harm
A disaster from the very start;
The choice of doing the accommodate thing
I could have pushed it all away...
Recklessly, we gave in to our hearts' desire
Author notes
"There are two tragedies in life. One is not to get your heart's desire. The other is to get it."
~George Bernard Shaw~
About a two people that are in relationships falling for each other.
A contest entry
- Come Join The Dark Side by Re-invention.
1376 points, ended July 17, 2008, 18 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
pleassse tell me what you think :]
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nice! a very heartfelt piece! congrats on gold!
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Thank you
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de nada
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Greattt
Ooh, hoe, these new poems of yours are darker and twisted -- I love 'em!!
*Though we never really meant any harm*
That single line spoke to me the most, and I honestly really have no idea why, hahah
*Recklessly, we gave in to our hearts' desire*
I liked that too. The image of two people falling for each other when they know it's wrong .. so sad yet beautiful at the same time."Forbidden love always hurts the most". This I know to be utterly true.
Wonderful
<333
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now this is perfection at metaphors darling.. well done.. I can sense the pain and deception at this too... The words were great so was the imagination.. like how you made a simple perhaps unnoticable rhyme in the thirs stanza.. which effectively made the poem powerful... the strong take of the woute is resembled at the ending which I have to say you did it flawlessly.. great job!
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we always give in to the heart...... why is that..... the brain should be smarter....lol.......
thank for entering this contest. .. and goood luck in it too..... thanks for sharing this......!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! -
This is beautiful. To get your hearts desire is to never wonder again what if...not to get it is to always hurt thinking...what if. this shows the great tragedy of even having a desire in your heart...Recklessly, we gave in to our hearts' desire...just amazing!
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wow nice work doll!
loved it much i was started to copy and past a few lines here and there but took them away for it was pretty much the whole poem i was pasteing and when that was a little pointless lol but amazing work indeed!
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The word choice here is amazing! I'm guessing it was a word prompt contest? Well, you did a great job here, one that I could never really do with a word prompt!
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Very amusing! I love how you describe each word you set down & I like the feeling that I get while I read the meanings to your poem. I love the "Sympathetic & apologetic;;" line and the "Temptation" one.
I'd want my fiance to read this, it reminds me of him
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Thanks ! ♥
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"Temptation dawdles in your fingers
Dangling slowly up and down my trembling arm"
That's really nice, and its so vivid! Your poetry is really beautifully done! Keep writing!
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'I could have pushed it all away...
Recklessly, we gave in to our hearts' desire'
Those last lines are beautiful, and it just makes me think, you should alwaysalwaysmostly give into your hearts desires, it makes everything so much happier... for a tiny amount of time... lol
This was so wows
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true to that..indeed it's always tempting do falling into our desires even if we fight not to give in...but in the end temptation always win...lovely write dearie...
Keep penning!!!
Lieu
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Wow!!! I love it! keep writing it is amazing!!!!!!!!!
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this one hits home...a disaster from the very start; i could have pushed it all away...sometimes things are amazing right at the beginning - all you can see is being with the other person. and then...things go downhill. reckless desire.
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Wow, beautifully penned, powerful piece. Good luck in the contest
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BEAUTIFUL. That's what I think.
I loved the beginning, it caught me until the end.
Good job and good luck!!
YAY.
<3,
Austyn
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"There are two tragedies in life. One is not to get your heart's desire. The other is to get it."
~George Bernard Shaw~
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oooh, ohkay, i can work with that :] Thanks♥
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