in bloom
same as last year,
the black tree
still dies in
the center, minus
two children
late for dinner
again.
the weeds hunched
over, bad backs,
leaving tracks
made by small
feet- still visible.
the brown patch
where the roots
meet the earth
still hurts to
trip over.
landing on
two hands,
the knees to another
pair of jeans
ruined.
hello to the
whimsical, something's-
not-right scenery
with lingering
austereness. god says
"hi" and "don't
climb that branch,
kid".
what good it
did. broke his neck.
the wretched boy's
poor mother.
and comp'ny
is comin' over
for supper.
Author notes
for all the times you've been told not to do something because you'll fall and break your neck.
A contest entry
- Spirit by Nicole Hanna.
4000 points, ended July 13, 2008, 19 entries
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This was great. I love how you took the simple worn out cliche of "Don't climb that, you'll fall and break your neck" and made it into a great poem. You know, I may be sick, but I kind of thought this was funny. It made me smile. Was it supposed to? I really liked it though.
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oh yes, it was supposed to be humorous. The same Black Humor that is found in a lot of Southern literature. Thanks for your comment.
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I really liked the way you wrote this. Im pretty sure you'll win this contest. Anyways did i mention before how i really like this poem? Good write.
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love the way you told this. & as a southern woman i think i can appreciate it so much more.
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wow. powerful.
jeez i love reading your stuff.
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Thanks
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hahaha, I never say that but my daughter just broke her arm and now I'm saying Don't let that thing get wet. You have a good story teller's handle on the world.
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Oh I've definitely had a lot of those times. Was a tomboy growing up, much to my mother's chagrin. Then again, she had three other daughters to be all "girly" lol. Loved the opening and closing stanzas. It's real life at work in this poem and totally relatable.
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