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The Artificial Forest

The shutters look aged. I haven't any.
I traded coverings for apple baskets,
Which broke teeth by wisdom.(Or perhaps folly?)
Why do I still assign to them vision?
Ghosts tend to appear when it rains.
I can see them through the wooden planks,
Like fog on brittle weathered panes.
Never did I possess shatterproof glass.

Sometimes, in the blood I would bathe myself,
And sip intoxicated on the splinters.
My hands faked remembrance of plywood carnivals.
(Or was it real, because I felt it?)
Often I would whittle a world round of shape,
Only to see it as a pine box, fashioned in haste.

 


 

Author notes

"I made a fire; being tired
Of the white fists of old
Letters and their death rattle
When I came too close to the wastebasket
What did they know that I didn't?"
-Burning the Letters By Silva Plath

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  • iamlost gold member
    August 6, 2008

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    Oh, that last line is amazing. I love the tone and word choice throughout this poem, absolutely marvelous and well deserving of that trophy.
    Well penned.

    ~lost


  • Viva La Vie Boheme
    June 30, 2008
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    "My hands faked remembrance of plywood carnivals.
    (Or was it real, because I felt it?)" - amazing!

    I love this entry! It's just so craftfully put together, it looks as though the words were made for the poem, and when read outloud (thank God for empty houses ) it just sounds as dramatic as Plath herself. Thanks for entering!


  • Angelflower
    June 29, 2008

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    this was freaky good!!! lol.. You did a wodnerful job.. It read kind of like the quote did too.. Lol.. It was really cool.. Anyway you did a really good job. I wish you the best of luck..

    Angel


  • Weltt
    June 29, 2008
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    Quite the clever composition. Liked the feel here.
    best of luck bro!


  • ears2hearyou gold member
    June 29, 2008

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    goodness..this was dark and deep

    cleverly done twisting the simile's....still chewing on
    it deliciously, each time i read it...a new image does
    appear!

    that last line really echoed....boldly!
    way to open up and pierce each line so revealingly!
    ears/Seattle loved it!

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    June 29, 2008

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    Oh.I do like this, I think that you and Ashley have this contest in your the bag this is a great piece amazing wording as always goodluck to you in the contest best wishes

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