Dense evening sky
Wind blows softly on skin
The smell of my perfume
Mixed with the smell of your sweat
As you look nervously in my eyes
The yearning for a kiss
As strong and powerful as your hugs
What a perfect evening
Long time we will love
Forever? No, eternity? Longer?
No, our love is longer that time
Sweaty palms, dried lips, stiff legs
Warming smile, beautiful eyes, careful thinking
What to do next?
Nothing. Nothing but to stare at each other
Then you say the words I longed to hear
As much as I longed your kisses
"I love you."
And then, the moon sailed away
And the sun rose to see the world again.
Author notes
I know it is not rhyme. I suck at rhymes and this is my first love poem.
A contest entry
- What Is True Love by misticmoonlite.
700 points, ended July 19, 2008, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Best of Love by JustFallingApart.
300 points, ended July 15, 2008, 12 entries
Gold trophy winner
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575 points, ended August 12, 2008, 32 entries
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Comments
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This is a LOVEly poem. And great for your first love poem aswell
Gives a great feeling of growing old with someone and then when you both die you will still be together for eternity. Loved IT.
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This was passionately penned with such true romance and love. I really liked these lines most
"And then, the moon sailed away
And the sun rose to see the world again."
--So full of beautiful imagery and emotion.
Thanks for entering & best of luck
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Wow, this is such a gorgeous and sweet
write filled with a lot of emotion.
I love the imagery that shines throughout
this piece. Lovely work here and all the best
to you in all of these contests! Congratulations
on your Gold for this one! Thanks a lot for
sharing it here!
Jeremy0826 -
wow!!! this is really sweet, it describes all your emotions of how you felt... I could almost live your poem, its amazing how you can describe something like this in a poem
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i really enjoyed
reminding me of the first kiss and time the boy in my life said i love you so great and the question that you brought up such a part of any relationship the last two lines really were fantastic great job -
you did a very good job on this, seeing as it's your first love poem, i realy like this. Makes me think about my love and I
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:) :)
oh and by the way may i say that this was very deep too.i loved the feelings! -
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for your first love poem,this is wonderful!it made me smile! -
very nice
rhymes are not me either, i love the way you spoke through your words,thank you for this entry, good luck
Lin
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