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Caledon

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  Caledon Mar.1991
(For Duane)
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There’s a stretch of road
Just out of town
Someone left a lorry there
Broken down
Forgot to put the handbrake on
Ten miles out of
Caledon

A misty night
For two young travellers
On a big bike
Devil may care,
They had a weekend pass
Starry-eyed, wind-blown hair
They were riding fast

It was a time of youth
A time of joy
A time for the best of everything
For two good buddies
One, just twenty three years old,
He was my boy

But fate and fortune
Had it all figured out
They’d cut some kind of deal no doubt
One of them would get the last laugh
Fortune turned away
With misty eyes, while fate
Wrote out the epitaph
Contract signed, the deal was done
The time and place
Make it Caledon


They came a barrelling down that hi-way
The time, they say, must have been theirs
Laughing and a-joking;
Completely unawares
Too late, or too early, who can say?
To turn the tide
That separated them from this world
And the other one
Only mentioned in prayers;
Nobody told them
It would be their last ride

They saw that truck
In a haze of blue
Too late for what fate
Already knew
They saw that truck
They were doing a ton
They hit that mother
Broadside on
And someone lost his first-born son
Ten miles out of
Caledon
 

The bearer of bad tidings came
Holding a piece of paper
With your name
He could have been knocking on anyone’s door
But mine had pulled the shortest straw
It was Saturday morning around half-five
I got the news
You were no longer alive
Two strangers standing face to face
Neither wanting to be
In the other one’s place

God knows what such encounters do
How they affect the lives
Of me and you
Tides change the course that rivers run
God rides a pale horse in the sun
And a universe tore out of me
One of us got trapped
And one got free
On that fateful night you came undone
Ten miles out of
Caledon
 

There was never a Monday
That’s been as blue
As the one when I came
To identify you
Your cold, broken body
Was as cold as a stone
Everything I remembered
About you was gone
With trembling hands I straightened
Your ragged, blond hair
Closed your eyes, which were fixed
In a china-doll stare
Felt salt water
Burning my cheek
And knew, there weren’t
Any kind of words
I could speak
 

There’s a desolate spot
On that long road home
Where I let loose my tears
And wrote you this poem
They say God writes our names
In the book of life
Yours is carved on a phone pole
With an old pocket knife
I’ve still got that little, yellow “mills tin”
That you used to keep your tobacco in
And a busted wristwatch
The hands frozen in time...
And a prayer that someday
This poem will rhyme...
 

For it’s taken seventeen years
To write this song
In the hope that the words
Would not come out wrong
It’s been a long road
And we’ve come a long way
And the hardest part, is not knowing
What to say
But the time has come
And I’m doing my best
To lay your memory to rest
I love you in my simple way
And wish there was something
I could have done
To change what happened on that day
Ten miles
Out of Caledon-

Where the grass still yields
To the summer wind
In those vast cornfields
That never end
And I guess when all is said and done
The night will fall
And one by one
The light will be stolen
From another sun
Ten miles
Out of Caledon


Copyright john Scott 2007

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  • EternitysLastWish
    November 13

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    This was a touching tribute and an amazing poem in honour of a wonderful son.
    Not only is it full of sentiment, but it is also brimming with raw emotion, which is something that not all poems can encapsulate. The whole thing just flowed so well... sometimes with long poems like this one, if they're not written very well I find myself drifting and not really concentrating as much as I should, but with this one I was kept absorbing every word until the very end, because you expressed yourself so beautifully and the language was well-chosen.
    The references to Caledon at the end of each stanza worked very well, also.

    Duane would be very, very proud.

    Thankyou for sharing this artwork with us.

    Jess x


    • humblpye gold member
      November 13
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      I know how it is with long poems Jess...I am guilty of the same thing...but after a while you get used to the authors, some are good at their craft and I always know when it's gonna be good, I never come away uninspired and glad I made the effort.
      I'm glad you took the time to read this as it's an important poem for me, it took a long time to write and that's because I did it over a period of years, there was a long time when I just couldn't go near it...anyway, it's my way of facing issues (writing) so I knew it would have to be done sooner or later, I guess I cried a lot of this out...and I'm glad of that too coz I've laid the ghost as they say, having said, he will always be around somewhere

      Thank you for your time, hope you're keeping well
      John♥


  • Dulcyflower
    September 17

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    Oh J, I am so so sorry for what you must have had to go through, I have just read this, written with such compassion and very well written. I can understand why it took you so long to write. I wrote a poem for my brothers funeral which I read out at the funeral and have never posted it anywhere cause it still makes me cry today, so I admire you for doing this. My sincere good wishes that the pain is now easing. The thought of losing either of my two sons I find unbearable so it takes some courage to write about it.

    Dx

    • humblpye gold member
      September 17
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      These things happen I have no idea why, perhaps somewhere down the road I'll find out...
      It wasn't the easiest poem to write but I'm glad it's done now, my way of coming to terms with things I guess
      Thanks for the comment Doe
      John


  • Jalalbad gold member
    July 16

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    I understand how you feel more than most. You know I lost my only child a son? He came back to me and told me he was ok many times after. And just as my Shane is, so is your son. They are not dead. They are alive as you or me. I am sure of this. If I wasn't, I would never tell you. Its a knowing that I can't explain, yet I know that I know. Your son is in a safe place protected by the Light. You will see him again someday.

    • humblpye gold member
      July 17
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      Yes

      I do appreciate your comments here Judy, they reflect my own, I know exactly what you mean when you say that 'you know that you know'...I have never had a visitation, but I have experienced many lucid dreams, but they are always of the prophetic kind, and never of someone who has actually 'died', perhaps we have many things to discuss, it is rather strange that you should pick up on this poem right now as it was posted a year ago, I lost a good buddy last sat morning, I found him in the room upstairs where we were both lodging, the shock waves are only now hitting me, it's been a terrible week...

      Thank you for your kindness


  • k.a.s.s.i.e
    November 4, 2008

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    i'm so sorry about your son. and how you actually saw him...wow... i wasn't with my mother when she died, but everyone said i wouldn't have wanted to see her...... they said she was just so emaciated, unrecognizeable. oh well. they're both happy now! i really liked the part where you were actually writing the poem...nice. a lot of people don't talk about the poem iinside the poem. that was creative!



    ~kass

    • humblpye gold member
      November 4, 2008
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      Yeah Kass...

      I guess that's why it took so long to write... I had to be in the right time frame/ mindset or whatever, this was done in bits and pieces over a long period, pushed aside, left undone, but I knew one day I'd have to complete it...I s'pose it's all about timing; for some things, you gotta lock yourself away...from everything and everyone, and focus...get to the heart of the matter... whatever the cost or the hurt involved...cry it together laugh it together, whatever emotion it takes...you got to tell it like it is...
      it's the only way to get release...

      Thanks for your kind words

      John


  • Rose Angel gold member
    November 3, 2008

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    Dropping by..and glad I did reading the story of your son..I have one myself, and God knows how many times a mother's prayers were behind him for safety. Grieving with you, over your loss...and glad you could put it all to this poem....A beautiful write of a Father's love, mourning his absence...Excellent write!

    • humblpye gold member
      November 3, 2008
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      I'm most obliged to you...

      for your sincere comment, some day when i see my boy again I'll take all these warming letters with me, and we'll read them all over again together...
      thank you for sharing I pray that your son will always be safe and loved

      John

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    October 31, 2008

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    John...I extend my deepest and sincerest empathy...seventeen years to find the voice to sing this song for your first-born son...one of you trapped and the other free...as a human being being human and as parent too I feel the cobalt-blue of the Monday that made you always walk with need to find rhyme and reason within destiny...forever entwined in the heart and memories of loving Father and beloved Son...the long and winding road that is colder than a Siberian winter for the soul to carry and the cross to be carried with care...may Duane sleep in sweet heavenly holy peace and may you find light and pristine peace of mind...please place your left hand on your right shoulder and your right hand on your left shoulder and squeeze real real tight...that's a heart-hug from this reader with respect to you...


    Rainbow Coloured Blessings


    Yvette





    • humblpye gold member
      October 31, 2008
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      Thank you Yvette

      for taking time to read, and for your most sincere and compassionate words; every single response that I receive on this poem becomes another seed that takes root in my heart; Duane's story is as long and lonely, as that winding road; the product of a broken home, so sad that we only began to know each other in the last few months before his fate...the photo was taken on one of his weekend visits to me, he was working at an oil refinery plant some 200 k's away from where I lived in the Cape, he rang me Friday evening and said he was coming thro, with a friend, they were riding a 750 Honda...

      Those were the last words I ever heard him say.

      Thank you again,
      I did what you said...
      Bless you Yvette


      John


  • waydownuponjoy
    October 25, 2008

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    Your poetical thoughts

    were a fine tribute to your son and obviously written with your heart wide open to what hurts so much. Death is such a tragedy for those of us who are left behind and a constant reminder of how fragile we are to the living pain of sorrow. Your poem says all, for those of us who didn't know about him. May you be blessed until that time when you meet him again! jy

    • humblpye gold member
      October 25, 2008
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      Your compassion and words...

      will always be heard by angels who listen carefully to all the tears that lost humanity cries
      no one dies forever
      we shall rise
      one day
      to be together


  • Life is a Beach gold member
    October 25, 2008

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    I love the picture of you and your son!
    This is so straight from the heart John that it cannot help but touch all who read it. It is beautiful and moving to the utmost! We never really lose someone, they just move on and one day we will meet again. It is sad for those of us left behind. While on this earthly plane time apart seems an eternity, but really it is but a moment in the grand scheme of things. I love you my dear friend! Pam

    • humblpye gold member
      October 25, 2008
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      You've been a stalwart Pam...

      ever since i landed on this strange and lovely planet; AP, (Amazing Place),
      You were there, right from the start,
      with a welcoming hand, and an open heart
      a soul gently crafted from silver and gold

      when God made you
      He broke the mould


  • ears2hearyou gold member
    October 25, 2008

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    BRAVO! BRAVO!....WE Stand as Poets and Compassionate Souls to honor and Salute you!
    This place that your ink found released passion, love,
    and highest honor.....your son has gifted you more then
    you realize....thankyou for sharing him with us....what
    a beautiful spirit and lovely man!

    Your Son has enriched the realms of heaven
    and we can hear him..sing and embrace your song!
    This was such a beautiful soulful gift for everyone
    who reads it!

    ears/Seattle
    BRAVO! BRAVO!
    Your heart has truly doubled in size.

    • humblpye gold member
      October 25, 2008
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      These are the moments...

      of our lives, when those deeply buried emotions of our hearts may finally surface and be measured with love and compassion by true souls; those who share one anothers burdens on this sometimes sad journey that we know only, as life
      thank you


  • Sunshine Always
    October 25, 2008

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    John, firstly let me say how sorry i am for your tragic loss. I don't know how to respond to this very sad piece,except to say that we only truly lose someone when we let their memory die. Your son will always live on in your heart...As time passes we remember more with smiles than sorrow...Bless you...mal

    • humblpye gold member
      October 25, 2008
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      Very kind of you Mal...

      These are the poems I really appreciate support on, i miss that guy more than anything, he was like a buddy as well as a son, cuz of a broken marriage, we never did get to share enough time together, ironically when he moved down to the Cape due to work, those were the most precious few weekends we ever really shared together...they were few, but oh so precious...
      Bless you my friend
      John

  • cindyloo
    September 30, 2008

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    this is so sad and beautiful at the same time. you put all of the emotions you went through into words very nicely. I love all of the this poem but I especially like how you told of the day you got the "news". You showed the raw feeling you had. As far as technical stuff, your prayers are answered, it does rhyme and flow smoothly. So soory for your loss.

    • humblpye gold member
      October 1, 2008
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      Thank you...

      for your kind and thoughtfull comments, I appreciate them all the more, knowing of your own sad loss, perhaps all our prayers will rhyme some day

      John


  • Lowell Poe
    September 16, 2008

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    Oh John,
    What could it mean?
    Why?
    How can a man live with such loss?

    ...and a prayer that some day this poem will rhyme...

    Im afraid thats where my tears feel.
    Your strength in the face of darkness is noble and so brave.
    Lesser men would have crumbled.
    One day we will all understand.
    but that day is not known to us.
    In a flash ...
    that very moment...
    things change that fast.
    He waits for you..
    and when you meet again,
    he will hold this poem in his hands..
    and you will embrace...
    and he will thank you for its beauty,
    in a place where there is no more pain.
    Forever in the light of love...
    where nothing matters anymore...
    but ecstasy and peace.
    Don't be sad...
    he would not want that,
    he will scold you if you do so...
    it is then that you will laugh together
    in eternity.

    Keep on pushin,
    straight ahead,
    LOWELL.

    • humblpye gold member
      September 16, 2008
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      Thank you Lowell

      I appreciate your comments on this poem a great deal...it took a long time for me to come to terms with Duanes' parting, there were many other circumstances which added fuel to the pain...it's a long story, my friend, like so many things in this life...
      thank you for your compassionate response...
      Walk good brother
      John


  • Wesley Storer
    August 26, 2008

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    Fate can be cruel

    17 years finally gave a fine eulogy to your son. It leaves me speechless, not knowing what to say, except it definitely conveys your sense of loss and love.

    • humblpye gold member
      August 27, 2008
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      Thank you Wesley

      That's a really nice comment and I appreciate it very much, good to hear from you again pal hope you're keeping well
      best egards John

  • Jalalbad gold member
    August 13, 2008
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    My only child, a son was taken too early, I know only too well the loss that cannot be described in mere words. I feel for you. I agree with sweet Myra- your song of love resounds in eternity.
    God bless and take care.

    • humblpye gold member
      August 13, 2008
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      Thank you kindly

      For your words; for taking the time to read mine; for your encouragement and support, I am sorry to hear of your loss, life is a strange game indeed, one day we shall know why, I believe this with all my heart...
      May God enrich your life with wisdom and understanding
      John


  • myrataal silver member
    August 12, 2008

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    Dear John ...

    worded by the wordless, your song of love resounds in Eternity ... for your first-born son and for all who mourn their losses ...

    Thank you.

    Myra


    • humblpye gold member
      August 12, 2008
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      My heartfelt thanks...

      to you Myra, for taking time to read and comment on this poem, I am sincerely greatfull

      Kind regards
      John


  • OurSolemnHour
    August 12, 2008

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    This brought tears to my eyes. Such a sense of feeling... I was overwhelmed. I cannot say I know what you have been through, but know you are in my prayers. I commend you for working up the courage to put such a tender moment into text.

    • humblpye gold member
      August 12, 2008
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      Thank you Friend

      your comments are always so touching and uplifting, I value them so much, and for taking the time to read this poem, I believe that our thoughts and our words are felt and heard by those to whom they are directed...may they always come with sincerity, from our hearts

      John


  • Knight Tigress
    July 11, 2008

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    " And a universe tore out of me..." So beautiful, so tragic as if a whole part of you is lost forever, though I have never had children of my own, I want to someday, and I can feel the pain of this loss, like it ripped the very essence of your soul out of your body and you are left only with a dark void to nurture. I can only imagine how the tears pull at your face when ever you think upon your son, god be with him. He is somewhere better now, and he is watching over you like a guardian angel...replying "Don't be sad father, i'm here and it's okay, I still love you," love, his love for you and the bond you shared shall never perish or die, which means he is truly living in you and the love you harbor for him and the bond that will be forever unbroken!

    • humblpye gold member
      July 12, 2008
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      Thank you!

      What a lovely compassionate response I think I'm finding the circle of friends I've been looking for all this time, it's a good feeling...


      • Knight Tigress
        July 13, 2008
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        You dear friend, will find a great many circle of friends here. We are all family
        God bless!

  • Life is a Beach gold member
    July 9, 2008
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    This is so sad. To lose a child. I have lost two brothers in the past, one 17 and the other 24 and my mom told me it was the worst pain ever to lose a child. (Losing brothers was no picnic either) It was horrible to lose my brothers and now having children of my own...well I can only imagine the pain of losing one of them and hope I do not have to face that. I'd like to go first! ***Pam*

    • humblpye gold member
      July 12, 2008
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      Love, no price

      How do you valuate love? I will tell you how; keep on trying, no-one knows everything thank god, but I believe it is the reason we are here, to learn
      I am sorry for your sorrows, as you are for mine, it is what connects us; "Love one another"; A humble carpenter said that, so did John Lennon, and so do I and so do you
      I know you Pam, we are kin


  • james119
    July 4, 2008

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    Well written throughout. I'm sure it was very difficult to write.
    This reader feels the sense of loss.

    "The light will be stolen
    From another sun
    Ten miles
    Out of Caledon"

    The metaphor is quite apt.

    • humblpye gold member
      July 17, 2008
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      Thank you Bob

      Yes, it was a hard write , that's why it took me so long I guess you never get over these things, but it's good to bring them out into the sunshine of our memories...

      Thanks for understanding
      Kind regards
      John

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