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White Water (Hay(na)ku)

Turbulent
Tumbling torrent
Titillating tired tourists

In a list

A contest entry

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  • iamlost gold member
    August 7, 2008

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    I love this, I kind of got a comparison to rapids and the flow of people and life.
    Well penned.

    ~lost


  • Swan song gold member
    July 19, 2008
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    I love these things


  • sailor ptolema
    June 29, 2008

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    cooL!!!
    love this ! excellent use of alliteration!!

    all my best in the contest!!!

    ~sailor ptolema



  • azure85 gold member
    June 29, 2008

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    Very cool haynaku, your use of alliteration is great. You can see the scene set before you, must be Niagra Falls... Good luck in the contest.