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whispers

 

 

 

 

I enjoy Saturdays. Lazy days at home;

where my life consists

of meeting needs & mending hearts.

 

The way he laughs & it lingers on edge

of heart-songs in my ear.

I hear it whisper all day & wish I

could put to words...

 

the way it tilts sideways & slips into

his eyes.

 

I enjoy the simple pleasure of a kiss,

morning breath & all; where we greet

hipbones & bird-songs...

 

making for a high- spirited day.

 

 

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  • MuddyKing Moderators member
    June 29

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    excellent

    this was my favorite passage
    the way it tilts sideways & slips into

    his eyes.

    for me that piece of imagery says so much
    loved the hip thing too
    best wishes
    peace and hugs
    Muddy


  • fortyninereasons silver member
    June 29
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    Juls

  • Nicole Hanna
    June 29

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    Though I enjoyed the poem in its entirety, I would much prefer it without the final line. The imagery of hipbones is enough to make me smile, as it's an incredibly strong image. Actually, you could probably do without the first stanza as well. I know not everyone is a fan of the super short poems, but I happen to love them! This is a great entry, thanks for sharing it.