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There is this place he lives I cannot envision;

no matter how many times I close my eyes

to the wet that clings to his chest...

 

where I lay crying for the love of us.

 

There are words gone un-written, somewhere along

the edge of tremors attacking my flesh;

 

where all he has to do is touch ever so slightly

& I am his like the first time

every time; & I want so much to know

what it is about this place.

 

He likens it to feelings of exposing heart to skin;

being born again in swallows of pride &

humanistic expression.

 

Perfection is so far away; but we love anyway.

 

We love washed in a river that never runs dry

& the water is a collection of tears

that come in response to a poet who wishes

she could find the words.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • tomisb gold member
    June 30

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    We humans are a strange lumber on the fires of our passions. We seek to be both the source and the result of the flames that consume us. When in the magic of two, when we forget that we are undone and defenses crumble before the quakes of love our happiness is not the fire of our bodies but the Light that shines in our hearts.
    Love, Tom B.


  • apples fell gold member
    June 29

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    This has a few semi-darker areas that I am not use to in your work, even though it eventually turns softer. I must tell you though that I like your "tremor" line for that very reason. It feels a bit harsh and I like that quality compared to the soft lines that follow. I like a mix of salty and sweet, I guess. Your ending is beautifully voiced.

    I would like to add that I think the contest you are in sounds a bit, well, let's just say I don't approve of the whole "post this in your authors notes", "do this cause I feel like it"...Contest guidelines like those are not my favorite, but that's something else entirely.

    Very strong piece love. Can't think of anything critical. I'd mention it if I could.

    ;


    • Faithbound gold member
      June 29

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      Thanks. I removed it from the contest anyway. I don't think this is what they were looking for. That is fine. I appreciate you coming by.

      • apples fell gold member
        June 29
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        Seemed kind of strange seeing that semi-angry rant in your authors notes...Took something away from your very soothing write. I am glad you like when I stop in. I do try as often as I can.

  • ardentMarch gold member
    June 29

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    "Perfection is so far away;
    but we love anyway."...love that!

    this poem is beautiful...

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