Strings see the spine, the soft of trace,
the full line of embrace;
mime music from clouds’ tender rain,
from coils of light
tight in the turn of quivering flight.
Keep yearning twirled on constant strain,
alone as night in dreams apart;
intense as churning blood in shimmering heart,
the pulse in veins spills scrolls of art.
Feel alienated Love vibrates its flint
of dart in
b
r
e
a
k
of wired sound ...
in friction of small plectrum's
plucking pound ...
A leaking font, these lonely cries:
deep sobs of loss
this wellspring ...
Stradivarius of sighs.
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In a list
A contest entry
- Desperation leaks through imaginary happiness... by Clinging-to-Life.
800 points, ended July 8, 2008, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Winklings Celebrates its 100th Contest (A Series) - Contest K by Lyndon.
6000 points, ended August 13, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Interesting title and theme
Free form with rhyme.
Sibilance works wonders for you in this musical poem.
Dear poet, accept my assurance that this poem would look very wonderful on the page of a book.
Who but a poet would say "Stradivarius of sighs"?
Stradivarius, yes, but I seem to hear a harp. Not in heaven, but alone on a stage.
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Beauitful. It has such deep meaning and is abstract. I enjoyed this so much...amazing
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Thank you so much ...
for the HM and the trophy.
I enjoyed entering.
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I read the words, close my eyes and listen to the heart strings hum. You are a master violinist of flesh and blood. Good luck in the contest.
Sincerely,
Leo Long
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Truth...
Tremendous tension in the strings
A master's bow of horse hair brings
Beauty resonating
Harmony contemplating
The human heart and tree soul sings -
music has its way with me, much like your poem did
I loved the way this holds you and makes you feel it
something that is so hard to describe unless you have been taken before
wonderful ride with a beautiful groove
best wishes
peace and hugs
Muddy
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A lovely metaphor in a beautifully free form.
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I liked how deep and emotional yet so defined this poem was Ver nice very well wrote
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Such a perfect choice of words to express your emotional message. Excellently written, with an easy flow. Well done
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This was a wonderfully written piece... the flow of this was just so soft and smooth and the imagery was vivid and detailed..You did a wonderful job.. I wish you the best of luck..
Angel
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I'll remember the title. It's very descriptive of violin music, and of the song of the heart. Simple and Effective. Well Done.`
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Good.
Well said and well composed.
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well done
Flows well. Good rhythm. Good rhyme. I especially like the first stanza. Did you intend that "b r e a k" be read as individual letters? That's how I read it and liked the effect.
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Lovely!
The imagery is rich and the form is complete. I am deeply impressed with the simple beauty of weaving words. Like a dance of letters coming together to make perfect sense!
Good luck!
Regards,
Jennifer
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a great opening verse - if one is in the positive mind. and i suppose even if one is not it still inspires - ah scrolls of art - my heart is fluttering dedication but my soul is crumbling with the madness of it all. alienatied, - let me ask you have you ever felt that? i feel that right now. and there is no escape from it. :|
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omg, I love this! O how deeply I feel about that violin. I can find no words to describe the emotions I felt while reading this beautiful piece -
It has been said that he made it from a piece of wood he found from Noah's ark
Much love to you sweet poetess, and good luck in contest.
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