I trusted you with my secrets
And you said I have sinned
If I dont change my ways
To Hell is where I'll go
I tried to change all my ways
Still you didn't like who I am
How can I make you like me
When you dont even care
You tell me we aren't to judge
Yet you sit in judgement over me
You say walk the straight line
Yet I watch you take curves all the time
I came to church
Upon your request
You looked me in the eye
And said your going to Hell
Is it because you know
I know your secret
The one where you touched someone
In places your to touch your wife
You can sit in judgement all you want
And tell me things that you don't even do
So when i make it to hell
I'll be waiting there for you
Author notes
10. "You tell me that I have sinned, that I am bound for hell. So once your judgement condemns you, I shall see you there."
- Thorin
For PD
In a list
A contest entry
- ---| Quote Inspired |--- by Tamaska Forsaken.
650 points, ended July 12, 2008, 6 entries
Silver trophy winner
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Be kinder than necessary, for everyone you meet is fighting some kind of battle!
Comments
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WOW!!!!! This poem packed a punch!! Thanks for giving me the chance to enjoy it.
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Eeek!
This is exactly the type of poem that I was looking for! This just reeks of intensity, of pain, of anger, and a delightful little teaspoon of blackmail.
I like the way you think, and even if the poem had a couple of grammar and punctuation errors, it was still bloody excellent!
Thanks for entering, and best of luck in the contest!
'Maska
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Intense, and the other person is truly wrong and guilting the writing into thinking they are the wrong one when they are not! Intense and in your face writing...great to call the other person on their own failings! No one has the right to sit in judgment on another.
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Oh yeah I have many people that I think this about see you in hell is what I want to say to alot that have hurt me again and again thanks for sharing much love always
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Wow.. this is a really sad write sis.. You did a wonderful job!! the imagery and flow were wonderful!! I wish you the best of luck!!
Angel
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Such a sad and pain filled poem! No one is without sin so are we to judge anybody. Heartbreaking poem!
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