you know that place
that place between sleep
but not yet awake
that magical realm
where your dreams
and subconscious thoughts
can come alive
that spiritual plain
no limits and no rules
anything possible
lines of reality blurred
that mystical dimension
were power pulsates
its cloaking aura
sounding and flowing
in star dust powder
that's were i'll be
my boundless freedom
and unconditional love
Author notes
Bronze to silver
A contest entry
- PIF Contest by Luckintheshadows.
510 points, ended June 30, 2008, 10 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Comments
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Lines 13 & 17 - "were" -> "where"
Oh yes...I know that place. The one where my roommates occasionally pop into my room to ask me something and I have no idea that I ever had that conversation.
Overall, not a bad write, although I think I would've liked to see a bit more depth. There were a few lines here and there that I didn't quite think fit in, moreso line 16 and the last line than any others. My advice? Don't try quite so hard and I think it might read a bit more naturally.
While I'm here, I might also add that while I can overlook the extra 15 words, I would like to see your username in the AN -
Lately life has been really hard for me. I loved this because it reminded me that there is a calm even if only in my dreams. You have wonderful imagery and it flowed nicely. Thanks for entering
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Wow, what a brilliant poem! Its so true and I really enjoyed reading it. I usually go for rhyming poems but this is just so good I will ignore that! Thanks for entering, and good luck!
-Michaella- -
A dream of a poem!
Lately I dream of poems I,m writing. I spend so much time on AP, bur I never want to wake up unless it's to get back on the computer! A great poem!
Good luck in the contest!
Regards,
Jennifer
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I lvoe this poems - dreams are good things (I just wrote a poem abotu dreams today *shrug*) ANYWAYS thanks for entering! GOOD LUCK!
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Superb! you capture the essence of dreams so incredibly well, I love this, the imagery and flow are brilliant. The last 3 lines are so amazing, they really put a great conclusion to your write.
Thanks for sharing this, and for entering my contest,
Luck. -
hi vp ag -
DREAMS kind of makes me want to jump back in bed backwards and retreat to the stage in my dreams you so well describe to see if I can scour those surreal realms to find you somewhere laced in stardust in my dawn today. A great description of an occurrence that is so prior to sunspringly common, but, until now - unfull-feeling. And I can not wait without apprehension, until tomorrow's dawn, to seek again in that tween time, for you. Great write -
ps. spelling error:
that mystical dimension
were (should not this be WERE ) power pulsates
its cloaking aura
best wishes, sweet dreams - billpoet
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