Devastating fingers
grip my mind like
liquid nitrogen,
Freezing in
my lungs,
every-time I
take a breath...
Smelling your scent,I become
a frightened child once again..
As fists of rage flow
through the air, your words
ring out loud and clear,
'flirt, whore..
You disgusting Jezebel',
when all I did was smile,
and whisper an anxious
hello..
Coldness seeps within this
withering soul as I flee
the monster that haunts me..
Colored make-up
paints my skin,
blending with the shadows
of black and blue..
Cornered like a frightened doe
Blackness reaches out, taking hold
of heart and soul.. Making death seem
like a treat..Wishing it was all just
a dream..Yet the monster does creep,
and with it my nightmare continues,
as the painful invasion commences...
I silently....
SCREAM
Though no one cares enough to reach out and hear me..
Author notes
Sorry.. I know that it sucks really bad but, I had a bad night so I needed to vent?
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No this doesn't suck its amazing so deeply bold and painful I'm so sorry if you went through this either way you painted and intense picture and magnificently...
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WoW!
Very good write... It's deep but sad, wish I could... *wipe a tear from my eye*... I wish I could make it all go away... Remember I'll always be here if you want to talk although I'm not online that much, I read my messages often and will surely make time for you my Angel... -
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no crying.. It's just memories that wanted to visit and I just needed to vent.. 
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Me forstands, but still talk to me if you feel the need to...
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I always do
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awesome!
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Thanks.. Glad you liked it..
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wow, this is powerful. a lot of emotion and intensity is pulsating through this. I love the picture too, what's that girls name?
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wow! This is such a poignant write filled with meaningful and original metaphors and beautiful imagery! I love the vocabulary and you did such a great job writing this Write on!
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oh god the memories. I'm not good at remembering... Damn. Oh well. I really like this, as sad as it is. I can relate to it all too well. I am sorry you had a bad night though, I get them myself. 
Great write.
Love-Sarah
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so much pain and hurt the scars are very visable he really done his job on you even when your not with him in person you carry him round like a bad penny fear has you doing this you have been his puppet on a string for to long that you are conditioned its going to take a long time to try and be independent to try and find the real you and not the girl he wanted you to be you have taken that first step admitting a problem then dealing with it most men that treat there woman like this are the weak ones in the relationship and get jelious of there wives or gilfriends confidence so you fight for your say some people do care enough to hear you and you will get stronger and the dreams will subside take care
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I know what you mean
I sometimes have wierd uneasy nights....good for you that you got it all out.
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very good I love it I know how it feels
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So painfully emotional. This poem staggers the mind. I was clinging to each phrase with feelings of concern. I hope things have gotten better.
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Sis this is so sad. I'm sorry you had a bad night and that these thoughts have come to you! You have written this so well that I couldn't help but feel that pain!!
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It's ok sissy.. Memories like these make any night crap..
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well done
I read it because of the title, as it sort of beckoned to be read. However I found this to be not only interesting but so emotional and so genuine in the feel of it. You have a good ability in expressing feelings with very visual imagry. well done gain. Image and Visions
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Thank you very much for your wonderful comment.. I'm glad that you liked it.. I believe that this is one of my most personal poems that I've ever written.. again.. Thank you..
Angel
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Your imagery here speaks volumes. A very very powerful and heartbreaking piece this is. I found this dark, disturbing and written with so much emotion.
You have to let your anger out at some point or other. Vent it. You have done just a little of that with this deep piece of writing. Keep writing, you are gifted.
Dark
Wishes
Wayne Leon
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The Silent Scream ...
and once again it voices its Thunder!
There are many ways to say NO. The BESTEST of BEST WAYS is to VERBALIZE it.
And poetry is therapy. For the poet and the reader, for it adds to social awareness ...
Love
Myra
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first my dearest twin, this doesn't suck at all.. second we all need to vent at some point. your feelings are important.. don't ever say that this poem or any of your others suck, because Sissy this was excellent.. I am glad that you got this out instead of holding this in.. I'm sorry that you went through this.
I love you Sissy, I love you lots.
kat
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sweetry it dosnt sucj
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very good
i likd this my favorite part is coldness seeps within this withering soul as i flee
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does not suck!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
loved it... well in a sad beautiful way.... i know this all too well.... hugs my sis.... i love you and will hold you tight as we both make it threw the night..... hugs... and never letting go..... hope you feel me ((((((((((((((((((SIS)))))))))))))))))))))
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this is amazing hun, just reading it has bought back memories and my lungs are playing up with me, my anxiety high, i love the poem it has a deep effect on me,
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What th hell happened to provoke this poem's creation. I can take a guess. A beautiful write truly amazing but I am concerned about you.
Lorcan
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Its deep, dark and troubled and makes me wanna hug you tight. Love, C
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omg, fish slap for you missy
i abs. love this, go you
keep it up, hope you are feeling better
your body gaurd
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You need to stop
saying your work really sucks. This is truly amazing. it's dark and sad without a doubt, but it's something that is very relevant and obviously it could possibly help someone to see what may lie down the road ahead if they continue to be with someone who will land them in this 'hellish nightmare' you so vividly described.
Abuse, is such a terrible thing, and way too many people experience it and it's 'side effects' too much..
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