my heart stumbled,
its rhythm painful
the morning she died;
flooded, emotions broke,
free as a bird in flight
silence, the unreality
of thought; there will be
longing, as tears try
their escape, imprisoned
within mind and heart
the familiar will remind,
emptiness also; memories
will shake foundations
of love, and of knowing -
mother and my times
healing comes; journey
of personal plight, known
by those that lost this womb
that bled life’s blood -
this world of motherhood
the mind, now clouded
by tears of ache, will later brighten
into sparkle, as thoughts ignite memories
of the mother, never to be forgotten,
now living within your heart
Author notes
My parents died 13 days apart. My prayers and blessings to your friend.
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A contest entry
- A contest for aboomer... by islekine.
600 points, ended July 16, 2008, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Congratulations on this Gold.
I am amazed that I did not comment on this poem, that I know so well! But here I am, saying: you captured the essence of that deep ache, losing your parents. How wondrous to await the reunion, the gift by Jesus the Christ.
Blessed be.
Myra
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Thank you
Myra. Some people's pain is more hurtful than others, as the one whom I wrote this poem about. Frans
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Hello.
First of all, this is a powerful write, the line about losing the womb.... very powerful, but the no holds barred, face what has happened is the path to accepting then peace. There are other great lines in this, the stumbling heart and painful rhythm, and I have to say a quite unique amalgamation of sorrow and free as bird. Normally free as a bird has happy connotations; I liked the reversal on that. Your description of the pain is graphic; as I said powerful write.
Must have been tough on you, having your parents die so close together. I hope you and your parents find peace in accordance with your beliefs.
My regards.
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13 days apart - that must have been a nightmare time for you. My heart goes out to you - I hope you are now at the point of enjoying the wonderful memories you have.
This was beautiful - brought tears to my eyes. I truly appreciate this - thank you.
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A truly beautiful write. The last stanza is memorable, and comforting. Thank you so much for your entry, and your uplifting words for aboomer. I know she will appreciate it.
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I had to let the tears fade...
Thank you so very much for your wonderful thoughts...
I know boomer will appreciate them...
Best wishes in the contest!
Write on!
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Oh that is so sad to hear my friend, I lost both of mine within 2 years and that was painful enough but this must have been unbearable.
z to you Love, C
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