She comes to me in the dead of night,
her skin radiant and pale as moonlight.
Clad in nothing but a soft whisper,
of desperation as I kiss her.
Casting shadows, casting spells.
On my skin, in my heart.
Oh my beloved succubi,
My lust for thee shall never die.
Oh my nocturnal concubine,
thou shalt forever be mine.
Casting shadows, casting spells.
In the dark, in my mind.
She is the black queen of night,
In unholy pleasure we unite.
Temptress of my darkest dreams,
spellbound by her orgamsic screams.
Her lustful hunger and beauty,
haunts my mind eternally.
And with her long raven black hair,
she doth forever ensnare...
My raven black heart.
*Incomplete.*
Please tell me what you think
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Interesting...
The title is what lured to read this.
The first stanza would have to be my favourite part of this piece. The whole piece has a very beautiful flow to it and I love how you ended it with "My raven black heart". All in all, this is a brilliant piece and I hope you keep writing.
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I really like this. A very good write.
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Hm. Old Englished mixed with love&lust. Good combination in my book. If you do make this longer, I'd love to see what you can come up with, as this seems finished as is. Extremely good write. Keep penning, dear poet.
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"Clad in nothing but a soft whisper,
of desperation as I kiss her."
OUTSTANDING line, I loved this. Excellent piece you have here Brother, Keep on penning, the poetry world seems a bit to full of sunshine and sweetness. Truth be told, some of the most beautiful things in life, can be found within a dark heart. ~Bret~
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Wonderfully done here.
Long raven black hair,
she doth forever ensnare...
Just perfect. Loved this. Keep the pen flowing.
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Stunningly beautiful write this is my friend!! good flow, nice atmosphere, like it...
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