Love’s declaration
concealed in laughter
of fragile friendships
Anonymous love
shackled and pleading
crying cheerful smiles
Macramed thoughts
precariously suspend
condemnation's bridge
A delicate passage
where few brave-hearts
survive the crossing
By alby
28.6.2008
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A provocative poem I can relate too, but I didn't brave the crossing, Here's an old poem of mine:
Good Morning
Good Morning my friend, really hope you have a great day
Just wanted you to know that yesterday it really was for me
I really hope you liked it too, that wonderful 6th of May
But to my dismay, before I knew you had to flee
I wanted so much to pull your body up against mine
Feel you tight and hold you in my arms so hungry for you
To run my hands into your hair, softly taste those lips, tastes in twined
But did that fire also burn in you, if only... If only I knew
Good Morning Beautiful, have a wonderful day
May you be warned, that next time we meet
My fire will blaze, and this time before you get away
Our lips will touch and onto your body, you'll feel my heat.
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It's not that great, but I just thought I'd share that with you
Ron
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Sharing in a most exposed way...
Thank you for your comment and the heartfelt poem you have given me. The words sound with an honesty so pure. To feel those hands through the hair and taste those lips, soft and fair...how delicate a gesture you have offered to share. So beautiful...alby
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there is something more in the concealed laughter and crying cheerful smiles...the magic spell of love ...love your poem
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Thank you again nilav. I'm glad you liked my poem...seeing through the laughter of friendship to a hidden love within. alby
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Bandit appreciation!
Thank you albymyheart for contributing to The Poetic Bandits reading list
~Lilac
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I thought your imagery and metaphors were interesting. Thank you for sharing your poem. Good luck to you on your future writes.
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Liked the line macramed thoughts and the rest of that verse. Good flow and some interesting images created through these words you have chosen.
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Great stuff.
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how very true this write is. you wrote it quite beautifully and i thank you for sharing it with me tonight. i am looking forward to readingmore from you in the near future. viyanna rosemarie
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Thank you for your kind comment here. Lovely to have a new visitor, I hope my other writes don't dissapoint you...alby
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Wonderful words here alby. I guess I just like them because I do. I don't feel the piercing urge to seek an explanation here. It has its subtlies no doubt but I enjoyed it for its rich flow and depth. Great job here. This was very fluid; almost musical to me.
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AsIThink I Thank you...alby
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nice soft sense...as if this poem had a smell of flower petals spread across it's page....(feeling poetic...lol) nice piece. i suppose laughter's secret is love and it's no longer a hush-hush thing! well written poem!
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Actually I put the flower petals in the next one! Lol...alby
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Why...Hello! Thank you for the visit and leaving behind your WiseWordz...alby f
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I really like the simple imagery that you have used to portray not so simple emotions this is a fantastic poem that has amazing impact (through use of short lines) and a wonderful effect on the reader thank you for sharing!
Keep writing
Polly
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Indeed.
Few survive,
the hardships
of like,others
just don't make it
and just are swallowed
by horrid things,
either way..
This poem specially
that last stanza spoke to me.
Good work.
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Nice Work!
I love this verse:
Macramed thoughts
precariously suspend
condemnation's bridge :however, isn't it supposed to be macrame? Nicely written poem about friendship & love. It is a delicate balance isn't it? Nice flow & rhythm to this. 
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Thank you so much for your lovely comment...alby
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Macramed thoughts precariously suspend condemnations bridge, laughter and tears, afraid to cross over and pledge openly from friendship to love, nice work.
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Wow, great! You got the meaning here down pat. So glad you could see it. Thanks for commenting...alby
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a depth of love and laughter you penned, tied together
as life throws many various objects to make the crossing precarious and difficult at times. nice flow as always. pleasure to read you. Thank you for sharing.
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Thank you my dear friend...alby
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this is just an amazing the way this poem is written..."Love's declaration...it is just like concealed yet revealed....manifesting but still in the state of unmanifesting...
my favourite lines:
A delicate passage
where few brave-hearts
survive the crossing
I really enjoyed it...please keep writing...
all the very best to you...
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Ahhhh!...Hello! So nice to see you back. I am glad you liked my poem and I look forward to the time when you decide to post again...alby
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Dear Alby
I'm afraid I still don't understand the poem.
You are writing about something you are trying to conceal, and doing a good job of it, at least it seems. Do you mean a suspension bridge? -
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Sorry if this habbit of mine frustrates you, but yes, I do sometimes like to write in such a way that the meanings are concealed to varying degrees. Poems that beg analysis. Not all my poems are like that though. Thank you for commenting and reading me and twice this time 'round. It is always much appreciated..alby
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ok
I see very little that makes obvious the changes so I still say the same ..amazing! -
Kind of deep for me, but I did notice it had 5 syllables in every line except the penultimate. Does that mean something?
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The words of perfection about true love and never looking back. One takes all the rights steps. At least I hope this is so.
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Yup..
it's just as I thought..Another amazing write!
it is very easy to see why you were highly recommended by my brother. good stuff my new friend!
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Thank you so much for your lovely comment. 'Tis nice to have you as a new friend...alby
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